Question

15．随着人们生活水平的提高，私家车的数量逐年增加，但随之而来的塞车问题日益严重．假设你是学校学生会主席李华，请给校报的英语专栏写一篇英语稿件，建议学生们尽量骑自行车出行，内容如下：
1．现象（phenomenon）：由于家长接送学生造成学校周边交通阻塞的问题非常严重．
2．建议：选择环保的出行方式-骑车．
理由：a．减轻交通压力；b．减少噪音和空气污染；c．锻炼身体．
3．改善交通，从我做起．
注意：
（1）可适当加入细节信息，以使行文连贯；
（2）短文字数：不少于100字．
Dear boys and girls，
I am Li Hua，chairman of the students'union．It is a common phenomenon that
                                                               
Yours Truly，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息随着人们生活水平的提高，私家车的数量逐年增加，但随之而来的塞车问题日益严重．假设你是学校学生会主席李华，请给校报的英语专栏写一篇英语稿件，建议学生们尽量骑自行车出行，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：现象（phenomenon）：由于家长接送学生造成学校周边交通阻塞的问题非常严重．建议：选择环保的出行方式-骑车．理由：a．减轻交通压力；b．减少噪音和空气污染；c．锻炼身体．改善交通，从我做起． 2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：due to由于； common phenomenon普遍现象；traffic jam  交通堵塞；environmentally-friendly  环境友好的，保护环境的；relieve pressure  减轻压力；air pollution  空气污染；start from ourselves  从我们自身开始
It is a common phenomenon that the problem of traffic jam around our school is more and more serious due to parents'driving kids to and from school．（高分句型一）
Actually，we can choose a healthy and environmentally-friendly way of travelling，that is，bicycle riding．（高分句型二）
It is obvious that bicycle riding can bring us many benefits，such as relieving pressure on the downtown transportation，making less noise and air pollution and so forth．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear boys and girls，
      I am Li Hua，chairman of the students'union．It is a common phenomenon that the problem of traffic jam around our school is more and more serious due to parents'driving kids to and from school．（高分句型一）
      Actually，we can choose a healthy and environmentally-friendly way of travelling，that is，bicycle riding．（高分句型二）It is obvious that bicycle riding can bring us many benefits，such as relieving pressure on the downtown transportation，making less noise and air pollution and so forth．（高分句型三）Most importantly，it does good to your health，because if you go to school by riding a bicycle instead of driving or taking a car，you can have a better chance of getting enough exercise you need every day．
       Reduce transportation pressure by riding a bike and start from ourselves!
                                                                                                                                                                                                                         Yours Truly，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                             Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．