题目内容
【题目】书面表达
假设你是李华,你的美国网友Jim发来电子邮件,告诉你今年他将高中毕业,打算去国外旅行。请你根据下面的写作要点,给他回一封邮件。
要点:
1. 祝贺他高中毕业;
2. 谈谈你对国外旅行的看法;
3. 提醒他在国外旅行时应注意的事项(至少两点)。
要求:
1. 词数100左右;
2. 邮件的开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。
Dear Jim,
I’m glad to hear that you will graduate from senior high school this year.
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Wish you a pleasant journey.
Yours,
LiHua
【答案】
Dear Jim,
I’m glad to hear that you will graduate from senior high school this year. Congratulations! I know from your e-mail that you plan to travel abroad after graduation. How I admire you!
Travelling abroad will bring you a lot of benefits. It’s a good way to relax. Besides, not only can it increase your knowledge but also it can help you make friends from different countries.
In order to make your journey enjoyable, you’d better pay attention to your safety and behaviors. First of all, always keep safety in mind and be careful with your money in case it gets stolen. Moreover, mind your behaviors when travelling abroad. Customs may vary in different countries. Therefore, you should learn and respect local customs.
Wish you a pleasant journey.
Yours,
Li Hua
【解析】
试题分析:本篇书面表达属于书信体裁作文,阐明对国外旅行的看法和建议。写作时注意以下几点:1、仔细阅读有关提示,弄清试题提供的所有信息,明确有哪些要点。2、提纲是文章的总体框架,要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象。要依据提示情景或词语,按照一定逻辑关系来写。3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态;就本文而言应该用一般现在时态。4.注意使用高级词汇和句式,以增加文章的亮点。
亮点说明:本文结构紧凑,层次分明,而且使用了多种句式和结构。比如How I admire you为感叹句。此外,文章还使用了大量短语keep safety in mind,in case等短语。副词moreover的使用使文章内容更具有层次感,也使语言更加连贯。