Question

你的笔友Peter想了解四川汶川的地震情况，请根据以下提示的信息，用英语给Peter发一封e-mail,，简单描述一下5.12地震。

要点如下：

1. 地震于2008年5月12日下午发生在四川汶川；

2. 当时人们正在上班、学生正在上课；

3. 大量的房屋、学校、建筑物被毁，水电供应中断；

4. 有70,000多人丧生，还有很多受伤者和无家可归者；

5. 是历史上最严重的地震之一；

6. 震后，全国各地都在积极援建地震灾区，三年来，灾区发生了很大变化。

要求：

1. 短文必须包括要点中的所有内容；

2. 可以适当增加细节，以使内容连贯；

3. 词汇：灾区（the disaster-hit areas）

4. 词数：120左右。

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Answer 1

On May 12, 2008, a big earthquake hit Wenchuan, a county in Sichuan Province. It happened in the afternoon when most people were at work and all the students were in class. When the earthquake happened, it seemed as if the world was at an end. Houses and tall buildings fell down. Water and electricity were cut off. In a few seconds the whole towns and villages were almost destroyed and lay in ruins. The number of people who were killed reached more than 70,000. Besides, a large number of people were injured and lost their homes. It was one of the biggest earthquakes in history.

Luckily, after the earthquake people from all over the country tried their best to help rebuild the disaster-hit areas. Over the past 6 years, great changes have taken place there. It has taken on a new look.

【解析】

试题分析：题目要求给笔友Peter写一封邮件，向他介绍汶川地震的情况。写作要点包括：地震发生的时间；地震发生时的情况；灾后重建工作等方面；词数在120词左右；必须包含所有要点，可以适当增加细节，使作文变得连贯；不要出现标点和拼写错误，尽量保持卷面整洁、字体美观。

亮点说明：

范文涵盖了所有要点，进行了适当的拓展，并注意语句之间的连贯性；范文还使用了定语从句、时间状语从句等语法知识，具备较强的语言运用能力。

语法方面：定语从句①when most people were at work，②who were killed；时间状语从句When the earthquake happened；表语从句as if the world was at an end等，显示了较强的语法功底，也使作文的句式变得多样；

短语和搭配方面：范文使用了fall down, cut off, lie in ruins, more than, from all over the country, try one’s best to do, take place, taken on等，使作文的内容变得充实；

篇章结构方面：范文注意使用besides, luckily, over the past 6 years等衔接句子和段落，使作文衔接紧密、语意连贯。

考点：书信类作文