Question

假设你是李华，下面是你校对中学生近视情况的调查，请你写一篇文章刊登在校报上，呼吁大家爱护眼睛，保护视力．

1. 初一学生的近视率为24％，到了初三上升到38%左右；

2. 高中学生近视率达到47.5%左右；

3. 导致中学生近视的原因：学习任务过重；用眼过度；长时间看电脑；不良的阅读习惯等；

4.怎样预防探视：注意用眼卫生．．．

注意：１)词数120词左右；

２）题目自拟

参考词汇：近视 near-sighted

Answer 1

Recently, I have made a survey that how many students have become shortsighted in our school. The result is so astonished that I cannot believe it.

At present, about 24% of the students from the first grade junior middle school are shortsighted. The rate of shortsighted reaches 38% in the third grade. In the high school, the figures are more terrible, reaching about 47.5%. Here are some main causes. Some students may not have enough sleep；Some students spend too much time reading or doing their homework without a rest； Some students even like to watch TV or use computers for a long time. In order to have good eyesight, we should do eye exercises every day. We can also try to do more sports in our spare time. We should have the good habit of using our eyes.

I think all of us should realize the importance of protecting eyes and try our best to protect them.

【解析】

试题分析：对于谈社会现象的文章，注意条理要清晰。首先要描述这一现象，并对这一现象产生的因为进行说明，最后还要提出解决办法。注意文中所给的信息，不可遗漏，可以多进行一些补充，尽量保持卷面整洁，字体美观，注意行文的连贯性。时态：用一般现在时。结构上：可采取总分总模式。使用一些高级句型和词汇提升作文档次。

【亮点说明】 文章条理清晰，首先阐述了社会现象，再由该现象谈到其产生的原因，最后提出了解决办法，思路清晰。开头一句Recently, I have made a survey that how many students have become shortsighted in our school 使用that引导的同位语从句，接着第二句使用so…that句型，加强语气说明此现象的惊人；对于三个数字的说明分别采用三种不同的表达：about 24% of the students、The rate of shortsighted reaches 38%、the figures are more terrible, reaching about 47.5%.，不同的句式和结构使文章更加丰富多彩，体现了写作者的水平。分析原因时，使用Some students may not have enough sleep；Some students spend too much time reading or doing their homework without a rest； Some students even like to watch TV or use computers for a long time.的排比句，是文章更有气势，更优美；在表示花时间时，分别使用了两个不同的表达：spend too much time reading、use computers for a long time。在整篇文章中还是用了made a survey：做调查、do eye exercises ：做眼保健操、have the good habit of：养成良好的习惯、spare time：空余时光、realize the importance of：意识到、、、的重要性等重要短语。在文章结尾处，呼吁大家要爱护自己的眼睛。整篇文章简洁而又清晰，适合发表在报刊上供大家阅读。总结：对于分析社会现象类的作文，我们要从三点出发：描述社会现象、解释产生原因、提出解决办法。

考点：考查对材料性作文的写作