Question

假如你叫李华, 你发现你的英国网友Alice的生活方式不太健康。你想给她提些建议。 请你用英语给写封电子邮件，内容包括:

用水果代替零食；

用水代替可乐；

减少使用电子产品的时间;

多运动；

注意：1. 词数120左右，短文的开头和结尾已经写好，不计入总词数；

2. 可以适当增加细节, 以使行文连贯；

3. 短文中不能出现与本人相关的信息。

Dear Alice,

Hope everything goes well with you.

Yours Sincerely,

Li Hua

Answer 1

One possible version:

Dear Alice,

Hope everything goes well with you. Do you still stay up very late every night? I'm writing to share my ideas on how you can live a healthy life.

First of all, I think it's a good idea to eat more fruits instead of snacks. Also, you need to get rid of the habit of drinking cola only. Why not drink more water? If you spend less time on your smart phone, you can have more time to get together with friends. What's more, don't you think doing sports often can make you look well-built and feel energetic at the same time?

All in all, a healthy life style makes us healthy, wealthy and wise in the future. Hopefully you can follow my advice and make a change from now on.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

【解析】

试题分析：本篇书面表达属于书信类写作，根据提示信息和题目要求来展开。写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确有哪些要点。2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象。要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写。3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态。写作书信时一定要注意文章结构和层次，提出建议时要具有说服力，对于一些常用的动词，要注意其其他形式以更为简练的表达自己的观点，要灵活运用各种短语和从句来丰富文章的内容。

【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种句式和结构。比如I'm writing to share my ideas on how you can live a healthy life是how引导的主语性从句。First of all, I think it's a good idea to eat more fruits instead of snacks用it作形式主语。If you spend less time on your smart phone, you can have more time to get together with friends是if引导的条件状语从句。此外，文章还使用了大量短语 goes well with , share my ideas on , get rid of , instead of、live a healthy life等。插入语First of all，Also，What's more，All in all的使用使文章内容更具有层次感，也使语言更加连贯。

考点：考查书信类作文