Question

【题目】书面表达

This is a picture of a ballet dancer whose left foot looks shockingly different from the right one. Some even jokes that the left foot represents how elegant ballet dancers look. On the contrary, the right one reveals the nature of those dancers’ life. One can hardly imagine how much time and effort have been devoted to endless practice.

【写作内容】

请根据你对所示图片及文字的理解，写一篇150词左右的文章，要点如下：

1. 以约30个词简要描述图片的内容；

2. 以约120个词谈谈你的看法，内容包括：

（1） 图片给你的启示，并举例说明；

（2） 你最想对图片的芭蕾舞者说什么？为什么？

【写作要求】

1. 可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文的句子；

2. 作文中不能出现真实的姓名和学校的名称

3. 不必写标题

【评分标准】

内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当

Answer 1

【答案】

The dancer’s left foot is elegantly wrapped in her ballet shoe, tied to the ankle with a silk ribbon. The shoeless right foot, however, looks horribly different. Bruises and scars occupy every inch of her toes. （36 words）

I can only imagine the untold hardship the dancer must have endured for the endless hours of practice to look so glamorous on the stage. Likewise, behind every seemingly stunning success, there can be failures, disappointments, and embarrassments. When the whole world is crazy for JK Rowling’s Harry Potter stories, rarely do people know it was after the books had been turned down 12 times by the publisher that they finally came out. Nothing is difficult to a willing heart. However, when we admire others’ success, we should remember it is not from nowhere.

I have imagined the dancer to be my friend. I will, instead of telling her how awesome her dancing is, ask her to take good care of herself, for health is the real elegance of life. （130 words）

【解析】

试题分析:本篇书面表达属于议论文，根据提示信息来介绍这幅图以及自己的感受。写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确有哪些要点。2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思。要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写。本文写作时可以按照描述图片内容、表达看法、想对舞者说着三个方面进行介绍。3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态。4、注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点。

【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种句式和结构。比如The dancer’s left foot is elegantly wrapped in her ballet shoe, tied to the ankle with a silk ribbon. 定语从句。rarely do people know it was after the books had been turned down 12 times by the publisher that they finally came out. 倒装句。Nothing is difficult to a willing heart、health is the real elegance of life.习语的使用。此外，文章还使用了大量短语inch of her toes、the untold hardship、 the endless hours of practice、stunning success 等。连接词likewise、however使语言更加连贯。