Question

【题目】假如你是李华，你的英国笔友Mary给你写了一封信求助。她因为最近学习压力大长胖了，时常被同学们嘲笑，并且长胖也影响了她自己的健康，因此她感到非常郁闷。请根据下列要求用英语给她回一封信。要点如下：

1.同情她的处境并安慰她，胖或瘦没有统一标准；

2.强调保持健康的重要性；

3.给出保持健康的建议。

注意：1.词数100字左右（开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数）

2.可适当增加细节，以使文连贯流畅。

Dear Mary,

I’m so glad to hear from you. but ____________________________________________________________

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Yours forever,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Mary,

I am so glad to hear from you. but I feel so desperately sorry to learn that you are depressed about some extra weight you have put on recently. To begin with, being fat or slim is merely a matter of personal opinion. With different people holding different views on this subject, there is no agreed standard for an ideal figure. So there is no need for you to worry about. What’s more, it being fit that is the most important for us. Only when you have a healthy body can you live to the fullest. As far as I am concerned, you can do some sports daily by which means you can keep healthy. Most importantly, it is suggested that you should go on a balanced diet at the same time, thus doing good to your health. I hope what I said above can be of great help to you. after all, health is to us what water is to life. I am looking forward to hearing your good news.

Best wishes!

Yours forever,

Li Hua

【解析】试题分析：试题为应用文中的书信写作，试题只给出写作框架，并未给出所有的具体写作细节，为半开放性写作。写好此文，需注意三点：一是写信格式要准确，信的开头已经给出，但切要写好信的结尾。二是要详略得当，本文要点如下：1.同情她的处境并安慰她，胖或瘦没有统一标准；2.强调保持健康的重要性；3.给出保持健康的建议。三要注意适当地增加细节，恰当地使用连接过渡词，以使行文连贯。另外，在写作时要注意时态、语态的合理运用。

【亮点说明】

本文是一篇书信，格式正确，内容符合要求，结构布局合理，句中使用高级句子。I feel so desperately sorry to learn that you are depressed about some extra weight you have put on recently.宾语从句和定语从句完美结合；To begin with, being fat or slim is merely a matter of personal opinion.独立成分To begin with,恰到好处；With different people holding different views on this subject, there is no agreed standard for an ideal figure.ｗｉｔｈ的独立主格结构运用经典；Only when you have a healthy body can you live to the fullest.部分倒装在句中体现；it is suggested that you should go on a balanced diet at the same time, thus doing good to your health.主语从句中的虚拟语气和现在分词做自然状语经典分层；另外，What’s more，As far as I am concerned, Most importantly,after all,等的运用为文章增色添彩。