Question

【题目】假定你是李华，作为交换生在一所英国学校交流学习。现在你即将回国，要作为学生代表在欢送会上发言，请按下列要点写一篇发言稿：

1.表示感谢； 2.学习的收获和感受； 3.表达祝愿。

注意：1.词数100左右；

2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

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Answer 1

【答案】Dear teachers and friends,

I feel greatly honored to give a speech here on behalf of all the exchange students.

Living and studying here makes us very fulfilled. During our stay, we have a better understanding of the British life, culture, society and so on, which have not only enriched our knowledge but also broadened our horizon. Apart from that, our abilities including listening, speaking and writing English have also got greatly improved. And it is all the English teachers and classmates here that we should owe many thanks to. Without their help, we couldn’t have achieved so much.

True friendship never ends, so I hope we can keep in touch with each other even after we go back home. And I also sincerely hope that some day you can come to China for a visit.

That’s all! Thank you!

【解析】首先审题，要求作为学生代表在欢送会上发言，写一篇发言稿。任务中给出的提示信息包含如下内容1.表示感谢； 2.学习的收获和感受； 3.表达祝愿。抓住了这亮点，我们就抓住了文章的核心内容，一定要注意发言稿的用语和格式。其次选用正确的人称和时态，考虑用一般现在时，第一人称来写。然后写出单个句子，使用正确的连词，连句成段。具体来说，写这篇文章时，要注意:1、提示中的内容比较泛泛，需要适当补充；2、为使文章层次清楚，可分三个自然段写：第一自然段说明自己很荣幸作为学生代表发言；第二自然段对自己的收获和感受进行总结；第三自然段表示友谊并不会随着自己回国而结束。这篇文章对于考生的综合能力要求较高，要求考生有很强的谋篇布局的能力和组织要点的能力。需要注意紧扣文章主题，给出的要点都需要包括，缺一不可。写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，不能出现文章脱节问题。尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。

【亮点说明】本篇书面表达要点全面，结构紧凑，是一篇较好的范文。这篇短文使用了大量的短语，为文章增色不少，如: on behalf of代表，Apart from除……之外。还使用了定语从句During our stay, we have a better understanding of the British life, culture, society and so on, which have not only enriched our knowledge but also broadened our horizon.和宾语从句And I also sincerely hope that some day you can come to China for a visit.等多种句式结构，增加了文章的可读性。