Question

【题目】假如你是李华，你们学校最近开展了创建“平安校园”的活动。你们班为此组织主题班会，请你用英语写一篇发言稿，谈一谈你对如何创建“平安校园”的一些想法。短文应该包括下面的内容：

1、安全意识的重要性；

2、在运动中要注意安全；

3、在校内同学间发生矛盾时，一定要保持冷静、理智；

5、逐步将“平安校园”活动转化为全体师生的实际行动。

注意：

1、不要逐句翻译，可适当增加细节使行文连贯；

2、词数120个左右；

3、文章开头已给出，不计入总词数。

Safety at school

My dear classmates，

There is no denying that safety plays an important part in our daily life. Recently our school has carried out a program aimed at making our campus a safe place to stay on.

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Answer 1

【答案】

My dear classmates,

There is no denying that safety plays an important part in our daily life. Recently our school has carried out a program aimed at making our campus a safe place to stay on.

I consider this as indeed a good practice, which will make us aware that safety should always come first in our daily life, whether when we stay at school or outside it. When we are doing sports, we should attach importance to the safety and avoid being hurt. Furthermore, when we get into trouble with our classmates, we should remain calm and avoid any form of fighting, which may only bring suffering and pain to us mentally and physically.

As far as I’m concerned, I feel all the students and teachers should work hard and creatively to keep the “safety at school” activity in mind. Besides, we supposed to observe the law discipline where we are at any moment.

Thanks.

【解析】

试题分析：本篇书面表达属于应用文，根据题中所给要求写出对建设“平安校园”的想法。写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确有哪些要点。2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象。要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写。本文写作时可以从几个方面来写对建设“平安校园”的一些想法。3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态。 4.注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点。

【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了大量短语。比如 plays an important part in，carry out，aim at，attach importance to。文章还使用了大量高分词汇denying，furthermore，discipline等。I consider this as indeed a good practice, which will make us aware that safety should always come first in our daily life, whether when we stay at school or outside it此句中连用的两个从句为文章增色不少。