Question

【题目】去年暑假你和家人一起去加拿大温哥华旅游。请根据下面提示写一篇短文，向同学们介绍温哥华这个城市和你的经历。

地理位置	被群山和太平洋围绕，是加拿大西部最大的港口城市
特点	气候温暖宜人，风景迷人，拥有许多湖泊、森林和国家公园，游客众多
你的活动	在海港扬帆航行，市区购物，……（自由发挥）
你的感受	……（自由发挥, 至少两句）

参考词汇：太平洋 the Pacific Ocean; 国家公园 national park；扬帆航行sailing

注意：1. 需要适当的自由发挥和拓展

2. 字数100-120

3. 文章首句已给出，但不计入总分。

Last summer vacation, I, together with my parents, went on a trip to Vancouver. _____________________________________________________________________________

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Answer 1

【答案】

Last summer vacation, I, together with my parents, went on a trip to Vancouver. Surrounded by mountains and the Pacific Ocean, Vancouver is the biggest port city in the west of Canada. Because of the warm and pleasant weather, there are lots of lakes, forests and national parks around. The scenery is so beautiful that thousands of people are attracted to travel here from different countries.

During the daytime, my parents and I went sailing in the harbor, enjoying the sea breeze and waves. In the evening, we went shopping in the downtown, wandering along the busy streets. Besides, we paid a visit to a famous national park nearby the city.

In a word, we had great fun in Vancouver and I was deeply impressed by the beauty of the city. I truly hope that I will have another chance to visit it.

【解析】

试题分析：本文是一篇提纲类作文，其话题是围绕一次去温哥华的旅游展开。通过介绍温哥华的地理位置，风土人情，以及气候景观，为读者展现了一篇佳作，同时结合自身体验，自己在温哥华的种种活动，表明那里的美妙之处。最后，为学生留下思考空间，发散性思维，合理拓展。写作时要注意篇章的层次感，合理布局，而且内容信息量大，要学会合理过渡，注意连接词的使用，以及上下文之间的衔接性。

【亮点说明】所给文章结构清晰，逻辑性严谨，给人一目了然的感觉，语言简洁生动形象。注重语态的使用，例如Surrounded by mountains and the Pacific Ocean这一表达使人感觉到对英语掌握熟练程度极好。同时The scenery is so beautiful that thousands of people are attracted to travel here from different countries句式的使用也为文章增色不少。非谓语动词的使用避免了连接词的频繁使用，例如my parents and I went sailing in the harbor, enjoying the sea breeze and waves等等。另外在遣词造句上也是独具匠心的，例如paid a visit to a famous national park，had great fun以及I was deeply impressed by。同时结尾处也是自然流畅，in a word的使用，最后也表达了希望再次旅行温哥华的美好心愿。