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7．假如你是任静，你的网友想在近期外出旅行，请根据提示，用英语给他写封电子邮件，向他介绍你对旅游的看法并提醒他旅行注意事项．
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1．旅游是一种非常好的活动：当你累了或有空的时候，到外地走走；欣赏美景，呼吸新鲜空气，交朋友，放松身心，有益健康
2．旅行前的准备：了解天气，带好衣服、相机、常用药品等．
3．旅行时注意事项：饮食和安全．
【写作要求】用恰当的句子表达各部内容；
开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数．
Dear John
I am glad to hear that you  are going to travel．                                          
Yours
Ren Jing．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示你的网友想在近期外出旅行，请根据提示，用英语给他写封电子邮件，向他介绍你对旅游的看法并提醒他旅行注意事项，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：旅游是一种非常好的活动：当你累了或有空的时候，到外地走走；欣赏美景，呼吸新鲜空气，交朋友，放松身心，有益健康；旅行前的准备：了解天气，带好衣服、相机、常用药品等；旅行时注意事项：饮食和安全． 2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：In my opinion以我的观点来看；As a result结果； In order to为了；pay attention to注意；
When you get tired with your work or study and you have free time，you can go out to enjoy the beauty of nature，where you can breathe fresh air and make new friends．（高分句型一）
 In order to have a pleasant journey，you'd better have clear information about the weather，bring proper clothes，a camera，some medicine for common injuries or diseases and so on．（高分句型二）

解答 Dear John，
      I am glad to hear that you are going to travel．Now I'd like to share my view on traveling with you．
      In my opinion，traveling is a very good activity．When you get tired with your work or study and you have free time，you can go out to enjoy the beauty of nature，where you can breathe fresh air and make new friends．（高分句型一）As a result，traveling will help you to relax yourself as well as build up your body．
      In order to have a pleasant journey，you'd better have clear information about the weather，bring proper clothes，a camera，some medicine for common injuries or diseases and so on．（高分句型二）Besides on your journey，you must pay attention to what you eat and your safety．
      Do you agree with me？Wish you a good journey．
                                                                                                                                                                                                                     Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                   Ren Jing

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．