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12．假设你是李华．现在，很多同学都因自己近视而苦恼，据此，写一篇广播稿，词数100个左右．要点如下：
　1．介绍一下你们班同学的情况；
　2．分析一下造成你们班这种情况的原因；
　3．提些保护眼睛的建议．
注意：开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数．
Dear teachers and schoolmates，
May I have your attention，please？
                                                                                
That's all．Thank you!

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息现在，很多同学都因自己近视而苦恼，据此，写一篇广播稿，词数100个左右，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：介绍一下你们班同学的情况；分析一下造成你们班这种情况的原因；提些保护眼睛的建议． 2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：deal with应对，处理；In my opinion以我的观点来看；because of由于；However然而；take measures to 采取措施做某事；Last but not least最后，同样最重要；
Now，it astonishes me to see an increasing number of students who wear glasses and some even in high degree，which worries themselves a lot．（高分句型一）
Second，because of the high pressure of study，they often study for too long without any break，which wears their eyes out．（高分句型二）
Whenever we are free，we can do some exercises to restore our eyes quickly．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear teachers and schoolmates，
　   May I have your attention，please？My topic today deals with the problem of short-sightedness in students．
 　  Now，it astonishes me to see an increasing number of students who wear glasses and some even in high degree，which worries themselves a lot．（高分句型一）In my opinion，there are three main reasons．First，their ways of using eyes are not healthy．Second，because of the high pressure of study，they often study for too long without any break，which wears their eyes out．（高分句型二）Third，some spend too much time before televisions or computers，which accelerates their symptoms．
　   However，we can take measures to protect our eyesight．Parents and teachers should look out for students who may have eyesight problems．When reading，make sure we are in bright places and let our eyes rest every hour．Whenever we are free，we can do some exercises to restore our eyes quickly．（高分句型三）Last but not least，if necessary，we should have our eyes checked regularly．
　　That's all．Thank you!

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．