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17．暑假就要到了，许多同学都会选择旅游作为度假的一种方式．的确，旅游对一个人的身心健康颇有好处．那么就请你以下面三句话分别作为三段段首的主题句，写一篇旅游的文章．
Travel is a very good means of broadening a person's perspective（视野）．
Travel may relieve（减轻）a person of boredom and gloom．
Travelers can choose different modes（方式）of transportation which have advantages and disadvantages．
字数要求：120．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息以下面三句话分别作为三段段首的主题句，写一篇旅游的文章，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：Travel is a very good means of broadening a person's perspective（视野）．Travel may relieve（减轻）a person of boredom and gloom．Travelers can choose different modes（方式）of transportation which have advantages and disadvantages．2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：Travelling much，you will not only enrich your knowledge and experiences，but also be aware of the vastness of nature．（高分句型一）句中使用了not only，but also，意思是"不仅，而且"
It gives you a pleasant experience，which will disperse your boredom and make you forget whatever annoys you．（高分句型二）句中使用了which引导的非限制性定语从句
Travelers can choose different modes of transportation which have advantages and disadvantages．（高分句型三）句中使用了which引导的限制性定语从句
Most people can afford traveling by bicycle，which，although slow，can limber up your muscles and get you closer to nature．（高分句型四）句中使用了which引导的非限制性定语从句和although引导的让步状语从句

解答 Travel
　　Travel is a very good means of broadening a person's perspective．It makes you come into contact with different cultures，meet people of different colors and go through  ceremonies．Travelling much，you will not only enrich your knowledge and experiences，but also be aware of the vastness of nature．（高分句型一）
　　Travel may also relieve person of boredom and gloom．Travel brings you enjoyment and attraction．It gives you a pleasant experience，which will disperse your boredom and make you forget whatever annoys you．（高分句型二）Travel broadens your mind and leaves you good memories．Later，you may go over these memories and enjoy your past experiences，thus keeping a fresh and sunny mind．The field's his study，nature was his book．
　　Travelers can choose different modes of transportation which have advantages and disadvantages．（高分句型三）Airplanes are the fastest but also the most expensive．Buses and trains are less expensive，but they soon make you feel cramped and uncomfortable．Ships provide you with comfort unless you get seasick．Most people can afford traveling by bicycle，which，although slow，can limber up your muscles and get you closer to nature．（高分句型四）

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．