题目内容
7.假设你是英语课代表李华,我校外教Chris今年来到我校任教,由于不太适应北京的生活,加之工作压力比较大,缺乏时间锻炼身体,Chris生病住院了,请你代表你们班同学给他写一封英文信,信件包括:1.表示对他的思念和感谢;
2.提出建议(至少三条);
3.希望他早日康复.
注意:
1.词数不少于100;
2.可以适当发挥想象,增加细节以使行文连贯.
Dear Chris,
I'm sorry to hear that you have been in hospital for several days.I am writing this letter on behalf of the whole class,who deeply miss you and care you.(高分句型一)We are grateful for everything you've done for us.
Actually,it is very easy for a person like you to get sick,who hasn't adapted to the new environment,suffers from great pressure and lacks exercise.(高分句型二)Here are some tips for you:
First of all,it is a good idea to take part in some social activities,which will help you learn more about the local customs and cultures,so as to get used to the new environment.(高分句型三)In addition,you should try to reduce the working pressure by listening to music and making more friends.Last but not least,you'd better exercise more instead of sitting in the office all the time.
Hope our advice would help you lead a healthy lifestyle and hope you would recover soon!(高分句型四)
Looking forward to seeing you soon.
Yours truly,
Li Hua.
分析 假如你是英语科代表李华,我校外教 Chris今年来到我校任教,由于不太适应北京的生活,加之工作压力比较大,缺乏时间锻炼身体,Chris 生病住院了,请你代表你们班同学给他写一份英文信,表示对他的思念和感谢,提出建议(至少三条),希望他早日康复等.具体信息已经给出,考生只需要适当串联即可,但要注意,此类作文虽然好写,但是要写出特色是很不容易的.关键点是要全面覆盖,不能有遗漏和省略.在写作的时候一定要使用合适的连接词来连接全文,让文章成为一个整体,并且运用多种表达方式.让句子富于变化.
Ps:书信表达格式:1.称呼(标点为逗号)2.正文(开头空四个字节写,注意分段)3.(期待回信)结束语,祝福语 4.谦称,签名.
【亮点说明】本文的书信表达格式正确,且全面覆盖了具体要求,感情真挚,值得借鉴.第一段表达了对外教的关心、思念和感谢,解释了写信的原因.第二段、第三段给外教因工作压力、不适应等因素而生病提出了几点帮助的建议,实际可操作性强.第四段祝福外教早日康复.考生一般可能会从题文的提示开始写,然后再写具体的要求,然而这篇文章讲外教生病住院的原因交代放在了第二段,也就是建议之前,巧妙而自然,结构上的调整让人眼前一亮.本文的高级句型结构、短语以及连接词也运用得恰当好处.短句或句型如:on behalf of(代表)、be grateful for(对..感到感激)、adapt to(适应)、suffer from(遭受)、it is a good idea to..(..是个好主意)、take part in(参加)、get used to(习惯于)、looking forward to doing(期待做..)、instead of(代替)、you'd better(你最好是..).连词如:first of all,in addition,last but not least等.文章也多次用到了非限制性定语从句1.I am writing this letter on behalf of the whole class,who deeply miss you and care you.2.it is very easy for a person like you to get sick,who hasn't adapted to the new environment.等,非限制性定于从句与短句结合在一起,使得文章句式富于变化.
解答 Dear Chris,
I'm sorry to hear that you have been in hospital for several days.I am writing this letter on behalf of the whole class,who deeply miss you and care you.(高分句型一)We are grateful for everything you've done for us.
Actually,it is very easy for a person like you to get sick,who hasn't adapted to the new environment,suffers from great pressure and lacks exercise.(高分句型二)Here are some tips for you:
First of all,it is a good idea to take part in some social activities,which will help you learn more about the local customs and cultures,so as to get used to the new environment.(高分句型三)In addition,you should try to reduce the working pressure by listening to music and making more friends.Last but not least,you'd better exercise more instead of sitting in the office all the time.
Hope our advice would help you lead a healthy lifestyle and hope you would recover soon!(高分句型四)
Looking forward to seeing you soon.
Yours truly,
Li Hua
点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题.它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力.在撰写时要注意主谓语一致,时态呼应,用词贴切等.要提高英语写作水平,需要两方面的训练:一是语言基础方面的训练,要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功,即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子;二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧
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