Question

8．假定你是李华，Tom是你的美国好友，他三年前来过你所在的城市．最近他写信询问你所在城市的变化．请你根据以下要点给他写一封回信．
要点：1．谢谢他的来信；
2．列举城市的一些变化；
3．欢迎他再次来玩．
注意：1．词数100左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
Dear Tom，
Thank you for your letter．Over the past three years，the city has witnessed great changes．（高分句型一）First，the environment is increasingly pleasant．Most high-pollution industries have been moved out of the city．It is now a new city with lots of flowers and trees．What's more，the transportation is more convenient．We have opened two underground railways，which have effectively solved the traffic problem．（高分句型二）
I remember last time you came here，the city amusement park was being built．（高分句型三）Now it has been open to the public．I wish you could pay a visit again and we could have fun in the park．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息 Tom是你的美国好友，他三年前来过你所在的城市．最近他写信询问你所在城市的变化．请你根据以下要点给他写一封回信．写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：谢谢他的来信；列举城市的一些变化；欢迎他再次来玩．  2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：Over the past three years在过去的三年里；What's more而且；pay a visit参观，拜访；have fun玩的高兴
Over the past three years，the city has witnessed great changes．（高分句型一）
We have opened two underground railways，which have effectively solved the traffic problem．（高分句型二）
I remember last time you came here，the city amusement park was being built．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Tom，
      Thank you for your letter．Over the past three years，the city has witnessed great changes．（高分句型一）First，the environment is increasingly pleasant．Most high-pollution industries have been moved out of the city．It is now a new city with lots of flowers and trees．What's more，the transportation is more convenient．We have opened two underground railways，which have effectively solved the traffic problem．（高分句型二）
       I remember last time you came here，the city amusement park was being built．（高分句型三）Now it has been open to the public．I wish you could pay a visit again and we could have fun in the park．
                                                                                                                                                                                                       Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                        Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．