题目内容
【题目】书面表达 写一篇短文
李华减肥以后,感到身体疲倦、虚弱,不知如何是好,于是他写了一封电子邮件向健康专家求教。请根据下面内容,以李华的名义写一封邮件。词数100左右。
原因:觉得自己太胖,体重不断增加,担心形象不美,有同学骂他。
过程: 1. 去健身房,两三次就放弃了,感觉太累也没时间。
2. 节食,坚持了大约一个星期,经常饿得不能继续他的学习。
3. 悄悄服用减肥药,一开始有效果,体重迅速下降,但减肥药对他产生副作用。
Dear Health Expert,
I have got a problem and I need to ask for your help. _____________________________________________________________________________________
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【答案】
Dear Health Expert,
I have got a problem and I need to ask for your help. I feel I am a little too fat. What’s worse, I am putting on weight all the time. I am very worried about my figure and how I look. I even fear that some of my classmates call me names.
At one time, I tried to work out in a gym two or three times, but I finally gave up just because I had no time for it and always felt very tired after doing exercise. Once I tried going on a diet. However, after about a week, I could not go on because I felt so hungry that I was not able to continue my studies. Then I bought and took weight-loss pills in secret. Shortly after, they did work and I was losing weight fast. But soon I felt tired and weak sometimes.
I know those pills usually have bad effects on our health. Thus, I don’t know what I should do. Could you be kind enough to give some good advice?
Best wishes
Li Hua
【解析】
试题分析:本文是一篇书信。文章给出了提纲式汉语提示。成文时应注意一下几点:
(1)内容要点要齐全:减肥原因;减肥过程; 寻求建议。
(2)人称:以第一人称为主。
(3)时态:一般过去时和一般现在时为主。
(4)适当使用一些连词和插入语,使文章自然、流畅。
(5)恰当使用一些高级词汇和句型,以增加文章的档次。
【亮点说明】1.使用高级句型:(1) At one time, I tried to work out in a gym two or three times, but I finally gave up just because I had no time for it and always felt very tired after doing exercise. (2) Thus, I don’t know what I should do.
2.使用了过渡词语:What’s worse, I am putting on weight all the time.
3.使用了重要短语I am very worried about my figure and how I look.