Question

【题目】假定你是李华，你校将在暑假举办国际中学生夏令营，主题为“感受中国文化”。请给你的美国朋友Mary写一封电子邮件，邀请她来参加，并说明相关情况，（大学故宫讲座；浏览故宫、长城等名胜古迹；所需费用等）

注意：1. 词数100左右；

2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

Dear Marry,

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Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Mary,

Here's a good opportunity for you to learn about the Chinese culture right in China.In the summer holidays,a camp will be held in my school for international students to experience the Chinese culture.

Lectures will be given by professors from famous universities in China.Students of different cultures can have a face-to-face talk with each other.Besides? trips to historical places of interest will be made,including the Palace Museum,the Great Wall and so on.Come and experience the real Chinese culture! You're free to stay in our school, but pay for entrance tickets to places of interest at a discount and your flights fully.

I'm looking forward to your coming to China.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

【解析】这是一篇命题作文。文章主要内容已经给出，考生在写这篇文章时，要注意以下几点：1. 通篇以将来时为主。2. 注意文章要以书信的形式进行叙述，一定要通过简单但必要的句子作为支撑，否则会显得比较生硬，且内容不够丰满。3. 写信目的要明确，内容要表达清楚。不能机械的翻译题干，可以使用适当的连接词，使衔接自然流畅，最好补充一些相关内容，使文章更加生动。

【范文亮点】

文章采用了“Here's a good opportunity for you to learn about...这是一个学习...的好机会”“a camp will be held ... to experience the Chinese culture.将举办一个感受中国文化的夏令营”“Students of different cultures can have a face-to-face talk...不同文化背景的学生可以面对面地交谈”“I'm looking forward to...很期待...”等高分句式。

运用了“face-to-face面对面的”“with each other互相”“historical places of interest名胜古迹”“entrance tickets门票”“at a discount打折的”等加分词组。

文章采用了“Besides此外”“including包括”等连接词，使行文更加流畅。

文章运用了“Lectures will be given by professors from famous universities in China.”“trips to historical places of interest will be made”等被动句型，使文章主动被动相结合，句式更加多变，避免了单调乏味。