Question

伴随我们成长，长辈们在不经意间老去。 一曲《时间都去哪儿了》戳中了所有人的泪点，引起很多人的共鸣。相信你也会有些感触。请以此为话题写一篇短文：

内容： 1. 你和一位长辈之间发生的一件事

2. 你的感触和反思

注意：1.短文须写在答题卡的指定区域;

2.短文词数120词左右;

3.内容充实，结构完整，语意连贯;

4.书写清晰、工整;

5.不能出现真实的姓名和学校名

 

 

 

 

Answer 1

One possible version:

The song Where Has the Time Gone moved many people, which also brought me back to an unforgettable incident between my grandpa and me.

When I was 13, my parent worked in Guangdong Province and I was take care of by my grandpa. I got addicted to computer games because of loneliness and learning-weariness. My parents were disappointed and angry, forcing me to drop out. But Grandpa said no. He decided to accompany me to school and waited for me outside till the end of class everyday. Until one day he was seriously ill, I was touched and felt guilty.

He used his own way to get me back from the wrong way. Now he is getting older and older. I can’t afford to buy him expensive gifts now, but I can help him with the housework. What’s more, I am determined to work harder to make him feel proud of me in the future.

【解析】

试题分析：本文属于半开放性作文。要求根据《时间都去哪儿了》写一篇短文，介绍与长辈之间发生的一件事，并说明自己的感触和反思。本文给考生自由发挥的余地较大。对于考生的综合能力要求较高，要求考生有很强的谋篇布局的能力和组织要点的能力。在完成开放性作文时，首先要选择自己熟悉的短语或者句型，在你的能力范围之内，选择句式时要赋予变化，因为这样你才可以更好的驾驭。同时也要选择合适的连接词，把各个要点组织成一个完整的整体，如besides, further, last but not least等。在发表个人观点的时候，可以使用谚语来提升整个文章的档次和文采，也能增加得高分的可能性。

亮点说明：范文里使用了较多连接词，如What’s more等，让文章成为一个整体，同时高级词汇的运用也较多。

考点：半开放性作文