Question

基础写作 (满分15分)
以下是“广州市文物保护研讨会”的有关信息:
时间: 2011年12月25日.
地点: 广东省博物馆
主办单位: 广州市文化局
与会人员: 历史学家, 文物专家, 广州市政府有关负责人等.
会议内容: 广州市的哪些文物应该要保护以及如何保护这些文物.
会议成果: 1) 确定了一系列需要保护的文物;
2) 明确了政府的职责以及非政府组织的职责;
与会者特别建议: 政府应该号召全民参与到保护文物的行动中来。
*研讨会 conference    *主办 sponsor  *广州市文化局 Guangzhou Bureau of Cultural Affairs   *专家 expert    *非政府组织 non-governmental organization
[写作内容]
请写一篇有关 “广州市文物保护研讨会”的通讯稿, 内容包括: 举办时间、地点、主办单位、与会人员、会议内容以及会议成果和特别建议。
[写作要求]
只能用5个句子表达全部内容
[评分标准]
句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章连贯

Answer 1

A conference on the protection of the cultural relics in Guangzhou was held in Guangdong Museum on December 25^th 2011. This conference was sponsored by Guangzhou Bureau of Cultural Affairs and present at the conference were historians, experts in cultural relics and the leaders concerned from the Guangzhou Government. This conference aimed to decide which cultural relics in Guangzhou should be protected and how to protect them. With all the efforts of the participants, the conference has not only identified a series of cultural relics which need to be protected but also has made clear the role of the government and that of the non-governmental organizations. In addition, the participants of the conference suggest that the government should get all citizens involved in the protection of the cultural relics.

解析写作前首先要看清楚要求，题目要求写“广州市文物保护研讨会”的通讯稿,只能写五句话，而且要包括内容包括: 举办时间、地点、主办单位、与会人员、会议内容以及会议成果和特别建议。在构建文章时要注意信息的整合，如：时间地点、主办单位与会人员可以在一句话中进行交代。例如范文中第一句A conference on the protection of the cultural relics in Guangzhou was held in Guangdong Museum on December 25^th 2011.就把时间地址巧妙地柔和在了一起，但要注意先交代地点，再交代时间，第二句话This conference was sponsored by Guangzhou Bureau of Cultural Affairs and present at the conference were historians, experts in cultural relics and the leaders concerned from the Guangzhou Government.里面既有主办单位，又有与会人员，而且用了倒装句。在表示目的的句子中文章用了aimed to词组表达了此意。第四句话是个长句：With all the efforts of the participants, the conference has not only identified a series of cultural relics which need to be protected but also has made clear the role of the government and that of the non-governmental organizations，用了not only…but also…连接了两个并列部分，信息量很大，而且这里that的用法也很好，指代前面的role. 最后的建议中，用了In addition, the participants of the conference suggest that the government should get all citizens involved in the protection of the cultural relics.其中的get…involved in…/in the protection of都是很常见的词组，恰如其分的表达了句意。