Question

15．假设你是红星中学高三学生李津，你校周六上午举办了高三学生成人仪式．在会上你和一位女生代表同学们发言，你父亲作为家长代表讲话．
请你按照以下四幅图的顺序，写一篇英语日记．描述图画内容，并谈谈自己的感想． （注意：字数不少于100词）

Yesterday our school held a memorable adulthood ceremony themed"growth，gratitude and responsibility"．（高分句型一）
I was honoured to be the host of ceremony，together with a girl．In the beginning，on behalf of all the students we expressed our gratitude to our parents and teachers．（高分句型二） Then a parents representative made a speech，expressing the best wishes and expectations to us，which made us feel the love and care from our teachers and parents．（高分句型三）Afterwards，we took an oath facing the national flag，showing our determination to be a qualified citizen and work hard for our country．Finally，hand by hand，we went through a so-called"Adulthood Gate"，which symbolized that we are all grown-up!（高分句型四）
After the ceremony，I know more about the meaning of the word"adult"，which attaches a responsibility to myself，to my family and to the society．（高分句型五）．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于图画类作文，根据提示信息你校周六上午举办了高三学生成人仪式．在会上你和一位女生代表同学们发言，你父亲作为家长代表讲话．请你按照以下四幅图的顺序，写一篇英语日记．描述图画内容，并谈谈自己的感想，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，2、要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：together with和…一起；on behalf of代表；made a speech做演讲；Afterwards在…之后；Finally最后；hand by hand手挽手；
Yesterday our school held a memorable adulthood ceremony themed"growth，gratitude and responsibility"．（高分句型一）
 It the beginning，on behalf of all the students we expressed our gratitude to our parents and teachers．（高分句型二）
Then a parents representative made a speech，expressing the best wishes and expectations to us，which made us feel the love and care from our teachers and parents．（高分句型三）
Finally，hand by hand，we went through a so-called"Adulthood Gate"，which symbolized that we are all grown-up!（高分句型四）
After the ceremony，I know more about the meaning of the word"adult"，which attaches a responsibility to myself，to my family and to the society．（高分句型五）

解答 Yesterday our school held a memorable adulthood ceremony themed"growth，gratitude and responsibility"．（高分句型一）
       I was honoured to be the host of ceremony，together with a girl．In the beginning，on behalf of all the students we expressed our gratitude to our parents and teachers．（高分句型二） Then a parents representative made a speech，expressing the best wishes and expectations to us，which made us feel the love and care from our teachers and parents．（高分句型三）Afterwards，we took an oath facing the national flag，showing our determination to be a qualified citizen and work hard for our country．Finally，hand by hand，we went through a so-called"Adulthood Gate"，which symbolized that we are all grown-up!（高分句型四）
       After the ceremony，I know more about the meaning of the word"adult"，which attaches a responsibility to myself，to my family and to the society．（高分句型五）

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．