Question

15．某英语杂志社正在举行征稿活动，主题为"梦想点亮人生（Dreams Lighten Life）"．请你用英语写一篇小短文，向该杂志社投稿，要点如下：
1．你的梦想是什么及原因；
2．拥有梦想如何点亮人生，使你的生活变得不同；
3．你认为实现梦想需要什么．
注意：
1．词数100左石；
2．不能使用真实姓名和学校名称．
Dreams Lighten LifeDreams can make us powerful and different．It is good to make an effort to make our dreams come true．（总述梦想的作用与意义）
I have been dreaming of becoming a doctor since childhood．（点出自己的梦想）Each time I see someone suffering from a disease，I feel sympathy for them．Also，I really admire doctors，for they can help patients by using their professional knowledge．（说明具有该梦想的原因）I know if I want to become a doctor．I need to master the essential medical knowledge and accumulate a great deal of experience．Keeping this dream in mind，I need to take action to realize it．【高分句型一】As a middle school student，I know I should work hard right now to master some basic knowledge and try my best to enter a good medical university．（为实现梦想，所要付出的努力）This is how my dream can lighten my life．Now I have a goal to fight for!My life has become completely different．（拥有梦想，会使自己的生活变得不同）
Admittedly，it is not easy to realize our dreams．I think the most important thing is that we should stick to them and never give up，we should also use the right method．【高分句型二】（说明实现梦想的方法）．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息某英语杂志社正在举行征稿活动，主题为"梦想点亮人生（Dreams Lighten Life）"．请你用英语写一篇小短文，向该杂志社投稿，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，要点包括：你的梦想是什么及原因；拥有梦想如何点亮人生，使你的生活变得不同；你认为实现梦想需要什么．  2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：
句型一：
Keeping①this dream in mind，I need to②take action to ③realize it．
牢记这个梦想，我需要采取行动去实现它．
①Keeping为现在分词在句中作方式状语；②need用在肯定句中是行为动词，need to do sth．意为：需要做某事； ③take action to do sth．意为：采取行动做某事．
句型二：
I think the most important thing is that ①we should stick to ②them and never give up，we should also use the right method．
我认为最重要的事情是，我们应该坚持并且永不放弃梦想，我们还应该使用正确的方法．
①that引导表语从句；  ②stick to意为：坚持，信守．

解答 Dreams Lighten Life
      Dreams can make us powerful and different．It is good to make an effort to make our dreams come true．（总述梦想的作用与意义）
      I have been dreaming of becoming a doctor since childhood．（点出自己的梦想）Each time I see someone suffering from a disease，I feel sympathy for them．Also，I really admire doctors，for they can help patients by using their professional knowledge．（说明具有该梦想的原因）I know if I want to become a doctor．I need to master the essential medical knowledge and accumulate a great deal of experience．Keeping this dream in mind，I need to take action to realize it．【高分句型一】As a middle school student，I know I should work hard right now to master some basic knowledge and try my best to enter a good medical university．（为实现梦想，所要付出的努力）This is how my dream can lighten my life．Now I have a goal to fight for!My life has become completely different．（拥有梦想，会使自己的生活变得不同）
      Admittedly，it is not easy to realize our dreams．I think the most important thing is that we should stick to them and never give up，we should also use the right method．【高分句型二】（说明实现梦想的方法）

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．