Question

【题目】书面表达

假定你是李华，计划寒假找份兼职工作。下面的招聘广引起了你的注意，请根据要点（箭头所指内容）写一封申请信。

注意：

1. 词数100左右；

2. 可适当增加细节使行文连贯；

3. 开头已经给出，不计入总词数。

Dear Mr. Smith,

I’ve read your advertisement for an assistant teacher for a children’s winter camp.

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Yours

LiHua

Answer 1

【答案】

Possible versions:

Dear Mr. Smith,

I’ve read your advertisement for an assistant teacher for a children’s winter camp. I’m very interested in this position and I think my personality and experience will qualify me for the job.

To begin with, I gain much experience of working with children from my part-time job as a babysitter. Besides, I have been a helpful assistant for both my English teacher and my classmates. More importantly, I can speak English fluently, which will help me work with native teachers from England. I will be available for the work on evenings and weekends and can start working from the end of this term. I would really appreciate it if you could give me this opportunity.

Looking forward to your early reply.

Yours,

Li Hua

Dear Mr. Smith,

I’ve read your advertisement for an assistant teacher for a children’s winter camp. I am quite interested in this position. I am outgoing, energetic, well-organized, and responsible; and most importantly, I love working with children! In the past two years, as a monitor in my class, I have proved myself to be an excellent helper to my teachers. I speak fluent English, which enables me to help native English teachers communicate freely and effectively with students in an English-only environment.

I will soon have a three-week winter vacation, so I have no problem working evenings and weekends. I can start working from the end of this month. I would be pleased to assist both the teachers and students in this challenging and rewarding environment.

Looking forward to your early reply.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】试题分析：假定你是李华，计划寒假找份兼职工作。下面的招聘广引起了你的注意，请根据要点（箭头所指内容）写一封申请信。这是一篇明显的提纲作文，就是把文章的情景和内容要求分成块，以条目的形式列出以进行写作。考生在审题的时候应该注意审要求、审文体、审人称、审时态。题文已经告知要求，那么文体应为书信文体，即介绍主要行程；又根据“你是李华” 写作时即用第一人称“我”，即李华；时态主要用一般现在时即可或一般将来时。考生在写作时应该选择自己最熟悉、最有把握的词语、句型，将要点逐条表达出来。表达时应该综合运用所掌握的知识，避开生僻的词汇，并克服母语的干扰，按照英语的习惯方式，用地道的英语表达出来，力求做到语言准确无误。然后根据要点选词组句，然后按照篇章结构连句成篇。

【亮点说明】本文语言凝练，论点鲜明，条理层次清晰。文章第一段就开门见山介绍自己想应聘的愿望。第二段具体介绍了自己的情况，第三段表达自己的愿望。文章使用了插入语To begin with首先，more importantly更重要的是；which引导的非限制性定语从句More importantly, I can speak English fluently, which will help me work with native teachers from England.（更重要的是，我会流利地说英语，这能够帮助我和那些来自英国本地的工作者一起工作）；固定句型的灵活应用I have no problem working evenings and weekends.（我在周末或晚上工作没问题）。高级短语和结构：be available for便于，qualify for因……而称职。最后一句使用look forward to doing sth期待做某事，给文章一个完美的结束。