Question

13．下面是你同学的一篇英文习作，请你帮助修改这篇作文．文中共有10处语言错误，每句中最多有两处，每处错误仅涉及一个单词的增加、删除或修改．
增加：在缺词处加一个漏字符号（∧），并在其下面写出该加的词．
删除：把多余的词用（\）划掉．
修改：在错的词下划一横线，并在该词下面写出修改后的词．
注意：1．每处错误及其修改仅限一次．
         2．只允许修改10处，多者（从第11处起）不计分．
Alibaba founder Jack Ma，his company has been valued at more than $ 221 billion of which Ma owned 6%，is put in the top position among China's wealthiest．But he stays outside the list of the world's 10 rich people．
Fought against a hard life，young Ma still managed to learn English well enough to gain a degree and became a teacher．Afterwards he started a translation agency in which took him to the US，where he introduced to the Internet．His fate was bound to change before he was accidentally appointed to take an American visitor Jerry Yang，a co-founder of Yahoo，in a tour of the Great Wall．The meeting obvious proved to be a turning point for all of them，promoting the birth of Alibaba and later cooperation with Jerry Yang．

Answer 1

分析 文章大意：本文主要介绍了阿里巴巴的创始人马云．马云的公司股价2210亿美元，他占6%的股份，他位于中国首富之榜，但他在全世界十大首富名单之外．年轻的时候，马云生活艰辛，但他通过努力成为了一名老师，后来他成立了翻译机构，这使得他去了美国，同时被介绍上网．他的命运从此发生了变化，偶然的机会他被委托带领雅虎创始人之一Jerry Yang去参观长城，这个会面是他们两人的人生转折点，促进了阿里的诞生已经后来和Jerry Yang的合作．

解答 Alibaba founder Jack Ma，his company has been valued at more than $ 221 billion of which Ma owned 6%，
                                     whose                                                                                             owns 
is put in the top position among China's wealthiest．But he stays outside the list of the world's 10   rich
                                                                                                                                               richest
people．

Fought against a hard life，young Ma still managed to learn English well enough to gain a degree and
Fighting
became a teacher．Afterwards he started a translation agency in which took him to the US，where he

∧introduced to the Internet．His fate was bound to change before he was accidentally appointed to take an
was                                                                                   when
American visitor Jerry Yang，a co-founder of Yahoo，in a tour of the Great Wall．The meeting obvious 
                                                                                on                                                         obviously
proved to be a turning point for allof them，promoting the birth of Alibaba and later cooperation with Jerry
                                               both
Yang．

1．his-whose  考查定语从句．本句中含有定语从句，从句中缺少定语，所以用whose．
2．owned-owns  考查时态．本文主要介绍马云，此句中表示马云所占股份，应该用一般现在时态．主语是第三人称单数，所以用owns．
3．rich-richest  考查形容词最高级．世界上十大富人，应该是最富有的十个人，所以应该用最高级．
4．Fought-Fighting  考查非谓语动词．本句中，主句前面应该用非谓语动词形式，fight 和主语之间的关系是主动关系，所以用现在分词．
5．去掉agency后面的 in  考查定语从句．本句中含有定语从句，从句中缺少主语，所以应该直接用关系代词．
6．在introduced前加was  考查被动语态．本句中表示他被介绍上网，所以应该用被动语态．
7．before-when考查连词． 本句中表示：在他被委托带领雅虎创始人之一Jerry Yang去参观长城的时候，他的命运从此发生了变化，所以用when．
8．in-on，考查介词搭配．on a tour 一般来说是用于表示"在…的就旅途中"．
9．obvious-obviously 考查副词，本句中修饰动词，所以应该用副词．
10．all-both 考查代词．本句中表示马云和Jerry Yang 这两个人，所以用both．

点评 短文改错主要要求考生掌握各种句法、语法知识，根据一些规律，再结合文章的意思作出正确的该正．注意文章的时态和人称．