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8．假如你叫李华，你的美国朋友Peter想了解目前你校中学生吸烟的问题，请根据下面给的要点提示，以smoking为话题，写一篇短文．
1．大部分中学生认为吸烟很酷
2．吸烟有害健康，特别对是对肺的伤害，能导致很多疾病．
3．为了自己和他人的健康，请戒烟
注意：
1．字数：100 左右；2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
There are many students smoking in senior high school．The reason may be that they think they look cool or appear to be more mature while having a cigarette at hand．（高分句型一）But there are a lot of reasons not to smoke．Smoking does harm to our health．It is dangerous to our heart and lung．A lot of diseases are caused by cigarettes．Cigarettes also have terrible smell．The secondhand smoke can also be dangerous to the others who stand around you．（高分句型二）Therefore，no smoking in public is a strict regulation in many countries．And the most important thing is that once you come into addictive，it's hard to get rid of it．（高分句型三）So，we must keep far from the cigarette--for everybody's health．．

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分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息你的美国朋友Peter想了解目前你校中学生吸烟的问题，请根据下面给的要点提示，以smoking为话题，写一篇短文，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：大部分中学生认为吸烟很酷；吸烟有害健康，特别对是对肺的伤害，能导致很多疾病；为了自己和他人的健康，请戒烟    2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：do harm to 对…有害；Therefore因此；get rid of摆脱，祛除；keep far from远离；in public在公共场所
 The reason may be that they think they look cool or appear to be more mature while having a cigarette at hand．（高分句型一）
The secondhand smoke can also be dangerous to the others who stand around you．（高分句型二）
And the most important thing is that once you come into addictive，it's hard to get rid of it．（高分句型三）

解答 There are many students smoking in senior high school．The reason may be that they think they look cool or appear to be more mature while having a cigarette at hand．（高分句型一）But there are a lot of reasons not to smoke．Smoking does harm to our health．It is dangerous to our heart and lung．A lot of diseases are caused by cigarettes．Cigarettes also have terrible smell．The secondhand smoke can also be dangerous to the others who stand around you．（高分句型二）Therefore，no smoking in public is a strict regulation in many countries．And the most important thing is that once you come into addictive，it's hard to get rid of it．（高分句型三）So，we must keep far from the cigarette--for everybody's health．

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．