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3.作为一名高二学生,你或许经常跟你的父母就看电视问题闹矛盾.你的父母以学业繁重和影响视力等为由阻挠你看电视,而你又认为电视能满足你的兴趣爱好同时繁重的学业下也需要放松,最后你们之间相互妥协达成了一致意见.请你以该话题写一篇字数120左右的短文.注意:1.就双方的理由可以进行适当的扩充,协议自己想象.
2.开头已写好,不计入字数
I am a Senior 2student.I often quarrel with my parents over whether I can watch TV after school.
分析 根据提可知道本文属于话题作文.通过提示语可总结出命题者让学生写的话题即父母与自己在放学后看电视问题上的分歧.所以在结构上可以采取三段式,第一段用两到三句话引出话题,第二段按照命题要求把父母和你本人在看电视问题的意见(理由)展示出来,第三段总结概括,进一步深化主题.在阐述理由时注意时态和长短句结合,搭配适当的过渡词使文章衔接自然.最后总结点题时注意呼应第一段内容和第二段观点.
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本篇范文开篇点题,直接引入话题I am a Senior 2 student.I often quarrel with my parents over whether I can watch TV after school.文体部分以My parents hold the opinion that…引入父母对于我放学后看电视这件事的看法和意见,随之用But in my view…道出我对此事的观点,过渡自然.在列举理由的过程中长短句结合,如I should study hard so that I will have more choices in the future.和Besides,they consider that it is harmful to my eyes to watch TV too often,which is the chief cause of short sight.文章句式错落有致,不显冗长或单调.其中还使用了定语从句it may relax my mind when I am tired,in which case the efficiency of my study will be improved,部分倒装Only at weekends am I allowed to watch TV和强调结构it is TV that gives me what I am interested in.等.文章过渡词也使用的恰到好处,如in addition等.除此之外,文中使用的词汇难度得当,固定搭配使用灵活,都为文章增色不少.文章最后用In the end we reached an agreement点题,并点明主题就我放学看电视问题达成共识.
My parents hold the opinion that I should study hard so that I will have more choices in the future.(高分句型一)
Besides,they consider that it is harmful to my eyes to watch TV too often,which is the chief cause of short sight.(高分句型二)
In addition,it may relax my mind when I am tired,in which case the efficiency of my study will be improved.(高分句型三)
This agreement is acceptable to me for it is beneficial to my study and life.(高分句型四)
解答 I am a Senior 2 student.I often quarrel with my parents over whether I can watch TV after school.
My parents hold the opinion that I should study hard so that I will have more choices in the future.(高分句型一)Besides,they consider that it is harmful to my eyes to watch TV too often,which is the chief cause of short sight.(高分句型二)But in my view,it is TV that gives me what I am interested in.In addition,it may relax my mind when I am tired,in which case the efficiency of my study will be improved.(高分句型三)
In the end we reached an agreement.Only at weekends am I allowed to watch TV,however,the programs are limited to news,sports and entertainment,not including TV plays.This agreement is acceptable to me for it is beneficial to my study and life.(高分句型四)
点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题.它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力.在撰写时要注意主谓语一致,时态呼应,用词贴切等.要提高英语写作水平,需要两方面的训练:一是语言基础方面的训练,要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功,即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子;二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧.
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