题目内容
假定你是星光中学的高中毕业生李华,母校将为高一新生举办主题为“What to learn in senior high school?”的英语沙龙活动,特邀请你结合自身经历谈谈自己的体会。请根据以下提示准备一份英语发言稿:
1.学会学习; 2.学会做人; 3.……
注意:1.词数120左右;
2.发言稿开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。
Good morning, everyone! It is my honor to be here to share with you my opinions on what to learn in senior high school.
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Thank you!
Good morning, everyone! It is my honour to be here to share with my opinions on what to learn in senior high school.
In the coming three years , our school life will be challenging. First,we should learn to learn efficiently. Personally, I used to try effective method to achieve my academic goals. Developing a good habit is also of importance. It really benefited me a lot to preview lessons, get actively involved in class, and review what had been taught after class.
In addition, we should learn how to get along well with others. In school, I respected teachers and was friendly with classmates. It was with sincerity and faithfulness that we created a harmonious atmosphere.
Finally, we should take part in sports and outdoors activities frequently. They were really helpful to build up my body and enrich my school life.
No pains no gains. I am sure that with great efforts ,you will enjoy a colorful and fruitful life here.
Thank you!
【解析】
试题分析:母校邀请李华参加为新生举办的英语沙龙活动,题目要求结合自身经历谈谈自己的体会,根据所给提示写一篇发言稿。写作要点包括:学会学习;学会做人;自己的观点等,词数在120词左右;注意发言稿的开头和结尾不计入总词数;注意书写格式;不要出现标点和拼写错误,尽量保持卷面整洁、字体美观;注意行文的流畅性。
亮点说明:范文涵盖了所有的写作要点,进行了适当的拓展,并注意语句的连贯性;范文还使用了宾语从句、强调句、非谓语动词等语法知识,具备较强的语言运用能力。
语法方面:范文使用了固定句型It is my honour to be here to share with;宾语从句①what to learn in senior high school,②how to get along well with others,③what had been taught after class,I am sure that you will enjoy a colorful and fruitful life here.;非谓语动词Developing a good habit is also of importance;强调句It was with sincerity and faithfulness that we created a harmonious atmosphere.等,语法知识运用娴熟,显示了较强的语法功底,也使作文句式变得多样;
篇章结构方面:范文注意使用first, personally, in school, in addition, finally等来衔接句子和段落,使表达变得更有条理,做到了行文流畅、通顺;
词汇方面:范文使用了challenging, efficiently, actively, benefit, preview, review, respect, frequently, helpful, enrich等高级词汇,能够灵活运用所学词汇,提高了作文的档次;
短语和搭配方面:范文使用了一些固定短语和固定搭配used to, get involved in, take part in, build up, with great efforts等,使作文内容变得充实;
范文使用了谚语No pains no gains.“不劳则无获”,给作文增色很多。
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