Question

18．假如你是我市一名高三学生李华，你打算报考一所外语学院．你在网络上看到上海外国语学院的招生信息（admission information），并对此非常感兴趣．根据招生要求，你需要用英语撰写一份个人申请报告，内容应包括：
    1．记述自己的个性特长及取得的成果；
    2．说明进入大学后的努力方向及设想等．
注意：1．词数：120-150；开头与结尾已经给出，不计人总词数．
    2．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
Dear Sir or Madam，
I'm writing to apply to study in your university．
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I'm looking forward to hearing from you soon．
Yours．
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇提纲类书面表达，文章的要点也基本上都给出来了，但不是很具体，考生要根据要点进行拓展发挥，不能有遗漏，内容一定要充实，这就要求增加了难度．在写作的过程中，要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型，如强调句，倒装句等，让文章更上档次．同时在列举措施的时候要使用合适的连接词如：First，second，Besides，What's more等，让文章看起来很有条理、流畅．
重要短语：
surf the net 浏览网页，get on well with和…相处好，communicate with sb与某人交流，intend to打算，major in主修，be admitted into被录取．
高分句型：
1．I read about the admission information while surfing the net the other day．这句话用了省略句，
2．Speeches delivered by famous people like Martin Luther．King，President Bush and so on，are also my favorite．这句话用了过去分词做定语delivered by famous people like Martin Luther．King，President Bush and so on修饰speeches．
3．As we all know，English is a universal language and I like to communicate with different people，so I intend to major in English if I am admitted into your university．这句话用了as引导的非限制性定语从句，so引导的结果状语从句，在这一从句中又包含一个if引导的条件状语从句．

解答 Dear Sir or Madam，
I'm writing to apply to study in your university．I read about the admission information while surfing the net the other day．I'm really interested in it．（高分句型）（写作意图）
I'm an outgoing girl and I can get on well with all my classmates．I do well in most of my subjects，especially in English．I like reading English poems and enjoy English movies．Speeches delivered by famous people like Martin Luther．King，President Bush and so on，are also my favorite．（高分句型）I once won the first prize for English Speech Contest held in our city and was honored the Best Speaker for my excellence performances．（自我介绍）
As we all know，English is a universal language and I like to communicate with different people，so I intend to major in English if I am admitted into your university．（高分句型）
I want to have a job relating with languages in the future and I believe I can help promote cultural communication between China and the world．（入学后的打算）
I'm looking forward to hearing from you soon．
Yours，
Li Hua

点评 本文属于应用文中的申请报告，范文中包含申请项目、具备条件、恳请申请单位考虑自己的申请，表示谢意，期盼回复等；写作过程中语言言简意赅，语气诚恳礼貌，避免了浮华、夸张的辞藻，灵活运用了一些高级词汇和固定短语准确表述，合理的使用过渡语和连接词，使得整篇文章过度自然，衔接紧密．