Question

【题目】（二十四）

假设你是红星中学高三(1)班的学生李华，请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，为校刊

“英语园地”写一篇短文，记述你和同学们今年为老师庆祝教师节的过程。

注意：1．词数不少于60；

2．短文的开头已给出，不计入总词数。

We had a special Teachers' Day this year.

（请务必将作文写在答题卡指定区域内）

Answer 1

【答案】

One possible version：

We had a special Teachers’ Day this year.

Several days before Teachers' Day, some of my classmates and I had a group meeting in order to decide how we could celebrate it. My classmate came up with the idea of making a short video, so a few hours after the meeting we went outside and filmed it in front of the school entrance. The evening before Teachers' Day, I edited the movie on my computer and added some music. When we eventually showed everybody the video on Teachers' Day, our teacher was very moved and the rest of the class really enjoyed it.

【解析】

试题分析：本文是一篇图画作文，要求以李华的名义记叙同学们今年为老师庆祝教师节的过程。根据图画式作文的要求，本篇书面表达应该写成记叙文，可以按照时间顺序来进行行文。写作时要注意记叙文的六要素，包括时间、地点、人物、事件、结果等。因为是记叙过去的事情所以文章要使用一般过去时，第一人称。而且要注意充分发挥想象来充实文章内容，使用恰当的连接词以使文章层次分明，条理清晰。此外，还要注意高级词汇和多种句式的使用，以提高写作档次。

【亮点说明】本文范文内容完整，语言准确，条理清楚，时态和人称使用正确，字数符合要求，是一篇不错的作文。文章的亮点是高级句式的使用，在文中作者使用了宾语从句 how we could celebrate it.时间状语从句When we eventually showed everybody the video on Teachers' Day和并列句so a few hours after the meeting we went outside and filmed it in front of the school entrance.等。此外，edit the movie, have a group meeting , come up with , 等短语也增加了文章的亮点。