题目内容
【题目】(五)
假如你是新华中学的学生李华,你的美国朋友Tom一周前给你发电子邮件,询问你暑假里的打算,但你因准备期末考试未能及时回复。请根据以下要点给他回封邮件:
1.未及时回信的原因;
2.你假期的打算(如做兼职、旅行、做志愿者等)
注意:1. 词数:120-150;
2 可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
【答案】
Dear Tom,
How is everything going? I feel terribly sorry for missing the chance of answering your letter in time. You know, I’ve been preparing for the final exams these days, so I forgot to write back. In your letter, you asked me for my plans on summer vacation. Now, I am writing to tell you some specific details.
Overall, three things will make my summer vacation meaningful. To start with, doing a part-time job is my dream and I intend to work as a salesman because not only can I earn money by myself, but also it will broaden my horizons. In addition, it is a fabulous choice to visit some famous scenic spots such as Mount Tai during the vacation, in order to enjoy appealing scenery and make more friends. What is more, doing voluntary work, I think, will make a great contribution to the society, which is able to enrich my life.
I sincerely apologize again for my mistake. By the way, what’s your plan to spend your summer vacation? I am looking forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
【解析】
整体来看,这篇提纲类书信体作文难度不大,题干具有 “字数虽少,但信息量不小”的特点。
本题是为了考察考生审题能力,命题人并没有把如“感谢”、“道歉”、“建议”、“申请”等明显的字眼放在题中,而是通过考察学生对题干的审题能力暗示学生此书信体作文应大体包含道歉和告知两个方面。因此文章的主干部分要先表示歉意、解释原因,后写假期的打算。
从写作要点和得分点来看,考生应在宏观上把握书信体写作的要求,如格式、文体等,写作段落以三段式为宜,首段体现问候、写信背景等,尾段再次致歉、也可询问Tom暑假里的打算,体现书信体的交际性;而中间段具体交待未及时回信的原因、假期的打算。考生在微观层面上应具体把握写作的内容和语言,做到句子之间有效的连接,长短句结合,多用doing及物做主语,句子有原因、结果、目的等具体细节的解释、利用简单而有效的中文思路扩展英文细节。考生若能在写作部分做到内容充实符合要求、语言精彩与众不同、结构清晰一目了然,相信这样的文章能让考生获得一个相对满意的成绩。
【经典套路】
第一段:问候+写信背景+写信目的
第二段:“道歉”部分(相当于“写信背景”)
第三段:“假期安排”部分
第四段:补充说明+客套话