Question

17．在阳光雨露里，我已长高、长壮，但这还不是全部，长大还应包括什么？是关心、帮助同学？是体贴、理解父母？是感恩、回报亲朋师长？还是…，成长的点点滴滴，久久不能忘记．请以I Am Not a Child Any More为题，记叙你在学习生活中经历的一件或两件事，表明你已经不再是一个下孩子．
要求：
1．请根据所给题目，用英语写一篇短文，不少于80词；
2．语言流畅、书写规范、卷面整洁；
3．文中不得使用你的真实姓名、校名，否则以零分计算
I am not a child any more
I have changed a lot during the past three years．I used to be weak and short．But now，I am strong and as tall as my father．The most important thing is that I have learned to care about others．
It was a Wednesday evening．When I went back home，no one was in．So I cooked the meal．I didn't know my mother was ill until my parents came back from the hospital．They both said the meal was very delicious，although it tasted salty．At bedtime，I fetched hot water for my mother to wash feet．My mother said，"Dear，you are really grown up．"
It was the first time that I had realized I was not a child any more．．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇提纲作文．内容是以I Am Not a Child Any More为题，记叙你在学习生活中经历的一件或两件事，表明你已经不再是一个下孩子．时态主要为一般过去时．人称主要为第一人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．
其次考生可从两个大的方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：
1．我的改变．
2．生活中经历的一件事
常用到的重点短语：
used to do sth 过去常常
as…as一样…
care about关心
grow up长大
高分句型：
I didn't know my mother was ill until my parents came back from the hospital．（高分句型）
本句是一个主从复合句，know后加的宾语从句，其中not…until直达…才，引导的时间状语从句．
They both said the meal was very delicious，although it tasted salty．（高分句型）
although引导的让步状语从句，表示虽然，其中主句还是一个含有宾语从句the meal was very delicious的复合句

解答 I am not a child any more
I have changed a lot during the past three years．I used to be weak and short．But now，I am strong and as tall as my father．The most important thing is that I have learned to care about others．（我的改变）
 It was a Wednesday evening．When I went back home，no one was in．So I cooked the meal．I didn't know my mother was ill until my parents came back from the hospital．（高分句型）They both said the meal was very delicious，although it tasted salty．（高分句型）At bedtime，I fetched hot water for my mother to wash feet．My mother said，"Dear，you are really grown up．"（经历的一件事）
It was the first time that I had realized I was not a child any more．

点评 以提纲提供情景的作文．要注意遣词造句的灵活性和语法规则的正确性，就不会造成审题不清而偏离主题，但要注意，文章必须覆盖所提供的各个提纲的要点．行文间要注意简化描述，用简短的语句代替冗长的语句．在作文完成的时候，应该检查、修改，以免遗漏一些需要表达清楚的要点和细节．