Question

假如你是爱华，请你依据下表，描述一下你的爸爸。

过去	现在
抽烟 很重 呆在家，上网 不干家务	戒烟 通过锻炼等方式来减肥 经常旅游，听音乐 帮妈妈干家务，辅导我功课
猜想一下爸爸和我们家庭未来的生活

要求：字数80—100，可以适当发挥。

 

Answer 1

【答案】

 

Hello, I’m Ai Hua. You know that it seems that my father has changed a lot in the past few years. Let me tell you about it.

Firstly, he used to like smoking. But now he gives it up. Besides he used to be fat, but he is losing his weight by exercising himself such as swimming and climbing. What’s more, he just liked staying at home and surfed the Internet. But now he is used to traveling and listening to music a lot. Finally ,he didn’t do chores. And now he not only helps mum with housework, but also helps me with my housework.

I’m very proud of him. My mother and I are very happy that he has changed a lot. We’re sure that he must be very healthy and helpful. Our family must live a happier life in the future.

【解析】

试题分析：这是一篇给材料作文，描述爱华父亲现在和过去的变化。本题给出了具体材料,但在写作时要注意时态，结合所给材料可知，描写自己过去时，应该主要用一般过去时，描写自己现在时，应该主要用一般现在时。写作中应适当使用连词，做到上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系。

【亮点说明】如果文章中使用了非常好的短语或句子会给文章增色，如used to do、losing his weight、it seems that、help with。句中使用了一些简单的从句，还运用了but ，Besides，And等使上下文衔接的更好。

考点：提纲作文