Question

My mother

提示：母爱情深，母爱无价，学会感恩，学会回报。妈妈给了你无限的爱，你肯定把这份深情牢计在心，写一篇短文，介绍自己的母亲和你们的真情故事。

要求：1.短文记叙你妈妈为你所做的一切，表达你对她的情感。你想对她说的话，你将为她做什么。字数不少于100个。

2.语言流畅，书写规范，卷面整洁。

3.不得使用真实的人名或学校名称。

 

Answer 1

My mother

My mother is a kind and gentle woman. She takes good care of her children and keeps them all at school. I have one brother and two sisters. So she gets four children in all. She gives us every comfort. We all love her and she loves us, too.

My mother has too much to do every day. She has to get up early in the morning and prepare breakfast for us. As our family is not rich, she has always to do very much work. She sleeps very late in the evening. She works hard without complaining.

She is very thrifty. She save every cent that she can and keeps everything in order. As she works hard for many years, her face is wrinkled, her hair becomes silver white, but she works as hard as ever.

She often says, work while you work, play while you play. What piece of good advice this is! I must keep it in my mind.

【解析】

试题分析：这篇作文要求我们以My mother 为题目写一篇作文，体会母爱，学会感恩，学会回报。短文中要对自己的妈妈进行一个介绍，写写妈妈为你做的事情，表达你对她的情感，把你要对妈妈说的话告诉她。所以这是一篇记叙文，文章中要记叙妈妈为你做的事情，把你对这些事情的感受，对妈妈的感激之情表达出来。写作时应主要使用第三人称，一般现在时态。如果举例的话，用一般过去时。注意表达的流畅，语句的连贯。

【亮点说明】这篇作文写得还是比较不错的。在短文中作者介绍了自己的母亲的性格，以及母亲在家里辛勤工作的辛苦。从这些点滴的小事中可以感受到母亲对孩子的爱。这篇作文内容完整，记叙的事实清楚，也有作者对这些的感受，对妈妈的爱。文章中比较好的句子，如She takes good care of her children and keeps them all at school.、We all love her and she loves us, too.、She has to get up early in the morning and prepare breakfast for us.、What piece of good advice this is!等。

考点：开放性作文。