Question

9．中国自古以来就有尊师重教的优良传统，"程门立雪"就是一个典型例子．请根据以下提示写一篇短文，讲述这个故事，并简单谈论你的看法．
杨时去拜见老师程颐→老师在睡觉→杨时在雪地等→老师醒来，地上的雪已经很厚了．
要求：1）词数80左右；
2）短文须包括所有内容要点，但不要逐句翻译，可适当加入细节和适当发挥，使短文通顺连贯．
参考词汇：respect 尊敬
Long，long ago in China there was a young man called Yang Shi．One day he went to visit his teacher Chang Yi．It was snowing heavily．Cheng Yi was sleeping then，so Yang Shi waited in the snow outside．He kept waiting in the snow until his teacher woke up．Then they found that the ground was already covered with thick snow!
We should learn from Yang Shi and respect our teachers．A good education makes a country strong!．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇提纲作文．内容写一个小故事"程门立雪"．时态为一般过去时．人称主要为第三人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．其次考生可从两方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：1．程门立雪的故事；2．我的感受
常用到的重点句型和短语：
Long，long ago很久很久以前
keep doing sth一直做某事
wake up醒来
learn from sb向谁学习
be covered with被覆盖…

【高分句型】：
Long，long ago in China there was a young man called Yang Shi．
本句中的called YangShi过去分词短语作为后置定语，修饰a young man．Long，long ago是时间状语．以及there be表示有．
He kept waiting in the snow until his teacher woke up．
句中keep doing sth表示一致做某事以及until引导的时间状语从句．

解答 Long，long ago in China there was a young man called Yang Shi．（高分句型）One day he went to visit his teacher Chang Yi．（拜见老师）It was snowing heavily．Cheng Yi was sleeping then，（老师睡觉）so Yang Shi waited in the snow outside．（雪地里等）He kept waiting in the snow until his teacher woke up．（高分句型）Then they found that the ground was already covered with thick snow!（醒来，地上的厚雪）
We should learn from Yang Shi and respect our teachers．A good education makes a country strong!（我的感受）

点评 以提纲提供情景的作文．要注意遣词造句的灵活性和语法规则的正确性，就不会造成审题不清而偏离主题，但要注意，文章必须覆盖所提供的各个提纲的要点．行文间要注意简化描述，用简短的语句代替冗长的语句．在作文完成的时候，应该检查、修改，以免遗漏一些需要表达清楚的要点和细节．