Question

【题目】书面表达(15分)

你校的美籍学生Mary刚来到杭州。她在校园网论坛上发了一个帖子，说她很孤独。假如你是李明，看到她的帖子，请写一个回帖。首先作自我介绍，然后提出建议，并说明你将如何帮助她。

要求： 1. 写出自己的信息

2. 写出你的建议及如何帮助她。

3.字数：80个

About yourself	Li Ming, Class3, Grade 8, like meeting people
Suggestions	Make friends, talk with, read books, listen to
How to help her	…….

Hi Mary,

I’m Li Ming from Class 3, Grade 8.

Answer 1

【答案】

Hello, Mary. I am Li Ming. We are in the same school. I am in Class 3 Grade 8. I like meeting people. I saw your post online and I know you feel very lonely. I would like to give you some advice. I think you should make more friends and talk more with them. In this way, you can share your happiness and sorrow with them. Besides, you can read books and listen to some music in your free time. I would like to be your friends and show you around our city. We can play games together after class. I am sure you will be happy and like this new environment.

【解析】

试题分析：这篇作文是材料作文，Mary是刚刚来到杭州这个城市，她感觉很孤独。题目要求我们以李明的身份给Mary发一个帖子，做一下自我介绍，给Mary提一些建议，并且帮助她。表格中给出了我们李明的一些信息，和给Mary的建议，我们需要用正确的英语把他们翻译出来，并且再补充一些内容，给Mary帮助。写作时，我们要把所有的这些要点都包括在内，要符合英语的表达规范，并且提出的建议要合理，要符合内容的需要。这篇短文应使用一般现在时态，第一人称来叙述。写作时多使用一些连词或是好的句型和短语，使文章意思连贯，表达流畅。

写作亮点：这是一篇优秀的范文，作者以李明的身份给Mary写了回帖，内容符合题目要求，使用的时态和人称都非常准确。首先作者先介绍了自己的情况；接下来针对Mary的问题，给Mary提出了一些建议；最后写了如何帮助Mary。意思连贯，内容完整；其次这篇作文使用了正确的人称和时态，符合英语的表达规范；最后作文中使用了一些较好的句型，如I saw your post online and I know you feel very lonely、think you should make more friends and talk more with them. In this way, you can share your happiness and sorrow with them.、I would like to be your friends and show you around our city、I am sure you will be happy and like this new environment等。