Question

【题目】书面表达（满分15分）

根据下面表格中的要点，以Be Thankful 为题写一篇作文。

感谢的对象	感谢的理由	如何感谢
父母	给予生命….	……..
老师	教诲我们
朋友	给予我们友谊….
社会	…..

注意：1. 词数80词左右；开头已给出，但不计入总词数。

2. 文中不得出现自己的姓名和所在学校的名称及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。

Be Thankful

Since we were born , many people have help us a lot . We are supposed to express thanks to them .

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Answer 1

【答案】

Since we were born, many people have helped us a lot. We are supposed to express thanks to them. First of all , we should thank our parents, who gave us lives and brought us up with love and care while never ask for payment. We also need to say thanks to our teachers. With their help, we open our eyes and learn much knowledge. They help us to grow healthily and happily. And remember to say thanks to our friends, who always understand us so well and are ready to help us out of troubles. In addition, we have to give our thanks to the society. It offers us many things that we need during our growth. Then, how to express our thanks for them? I think the best way is to become a useful person and help others. Only in this way can we pay them back.

【解析】

试题分析：这篇文章围绕感恩而写， 内容包括对父母，老师，朋友和社会的感激，以及如何去感谢。文章可以用第一人称，和一般现在时。写作时要注意要点的完整性，每一个要点不必写得太详细，但都要包括。文章可适当使用一些连接词和承接性的句子，加强文章的逻辑性和紧凑性。在表达感谢时刻尝试使用不同的表达方式，避免单词和句式的单一性。

写作亮点： 这篇文章要点齐全，表达准确流畅，是一篇优秀的作文。文中使用了一些连接词，例如First of all首先，also也，and和，In addition另外，Then然后，等等，使文章结构非常分明。另外，文中用了一些复合句，First of all , we should thank our parents, who gave us lives and brought us up with love and care while never ask for payment. And remember to say thanks to our friends, who always understand us so well and are ready to help us out of troubles. 两个句子都包含了定语从句。另外一些特殊句式Only in this way can we pay them back.是一个倒装句。