Question

写一篇请求加入观鸟协会的申请（80字左右）

你叫李明，阳光中学八年级学生

最喜爱的科目是生物，对各种鸟类植物感兴趣

想成为观鸟协会的一员，了解更多鸟类知识

做点事保护鸟类，星期六下午3-5点可以参加活动

Dear Chairperson

I would like to join the Birdwatching Society.

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I will be very happy if I can become a member of the Birdwatching Society. My telephone number is 12345678910.

 

Answer 1

Dear Chairperson ,

I would like to join the Birdwatching Society.

First, I’m a 15-year-old student in Grade 8 at Sunshine secondary school. My name is Li Ming. Second, my favourite subject is biologist and I’m very interested in all kinds of birds and plants. I’m also an animal lover, so I love birds and nature very much. Next, I want to join the Birdwatching Society to learn more knowledge about birds. Finally, I think it is very important for me to do something to protect birds. I can take part in the activities from three to five o’clock on every Sunday afternoon.

I will be very happy if I can become a member of the Birdwatching Society. My telephone number is 12345678910.

Yours sincerely,

Liming

【解析】

试题分析：这是一篇提纲作文。本文要求按照所给的提示内容完成这篇申请书信，我们要用恰当的语言把所列举的内容准确地表达出来。写作中要包含自己的基本信息、兴趣爱好、入会的目的和业余时间等四个方面进行陈述，表达出自己想入会的迫切心情等。根据材料内容可知本文主要是一般现在时态，人称主要是第一人称，注意并列连词的使用及主谓一致问题。写作中注意上下文的过度，符合逻辑关系。

【亮点说明】这篇短文简明、扼要地阐明了自己的入会申请，并包含了文中所要求的全部信息。其中使用了一些固定句式和短语，包含过渡语的准确使用为文章增色不少.如take part in，I’m very interested in all kinds of birds and plants，it is very important for me to do something to protect birds.，First, Second, Next, Finally,学习中再注意总结,牢记一些固定句式及短语,写作时就可以适当引用,使文章的表达更有逻辑性,更富有条理。

考点：提纲作文。