Question

书面表达
近来，全国正在进行平安校园建设，我市也不例外。作为一名学生，我们更应该珍惜自己的生命，更应该注意自己的人身安全。假如你是Daming，并担任校学生会主席，请你就安全问题，向全校学生发出倡议，写一封安全倡议书。
内容提示：
（1）不带管制刀具到学校；
（2）不私自下河洗澡；
（3）不打架；
（4）上学放学的途中应该注意安全；
（5）遇紧急情况，立即报告警察或老师。
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参考词汇：管制刀具：restricted knives or things；洗澡：have a bath；打架：fight；紧急情况：emergency；交通安全：pay attention to the traffic。
写作要求：（1）用词恰当，要点全面，层次清晰，书写规范。
（2）可适当发挥，80词左右，开头、结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
（3）严禁出现自己的真实姓名和学校等相关信息。
Dear students,
As we know, safety is the most important thing in our lives. So, we should _____________________________________________________________________
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Yours,
Daming

Answer 1

Dear students,
As we know, safety is the most important thing in our lives. So, we should try our best to make sure we are safe. We mustn’t bring restricted knives or things to our school because these things may cause serious problems. Do not have a bath in rivers or ponds by ourselves without our parents permission. And, we should be friendly to others so fighting is strongly banned. Make sure that we should always pay attention to the traffic on our way to school or home. Furthermore, if we meet some emergency, we must call for help from the police or our teachers. In a word, following these safety rules above can make us live in peace.
Yours,
Daming    

试题分析：本文的写作开门见山对文章直接描写我们应该采取的措施，不允许带管制刀具mustn’t bring restricted knives or things，不要未经允许下河游泳Do not have a bath in rivers or ponds by ourselves without our parents permission.同时我们对别人要友好，不要打架we should be friendly to others so fighting is strongly banned. 上学放学的途中应该注意安全Make sure that we should always pay attention to the traffic on our way to school or home.遇紧急情况，立即报告警察或老师if we meet some emergency, we must call for help from the police or our teachers.最后用一句话对文章进行总结In a word, following these safety rules above can make us live in peace.
点评：初中英语的作文，着重考察学生连词成句的能力，要在“准”字上下功夫。在写作中注意人称与谓语动词的数关系和动词时态等诸多方面。在对所出现的问题或是采取的措施描写中注意使用连词或是好的句式如have a  far-reaching effect on sth对…有深远的影响，only 置于句首的倒装及only when …,can we…等。对于中学作文的写作，尽量将所学的知识运用到作文中，写出富于变化、结构紧凑的文章，不要出现中式英文。在平时的练习中，注意多背诵范文，对于写的好的句子进行默写，考试时就能写出准确地道的作文。