Question

Write a passage on “A letter to my headmaster/headmistress ” in at least 60 words according to the given situation (以“给校长的一封信”为题，写一篇不少于60词的文章。)
提示：初中学习阶段肯定给你留下许多的回忆。有甜美，有苦涩，这些都是宝贵的人生经历。在即将告别你的初中生活，请你以Susan的名义给你的校长写一封信，分享一件让你最难忘的校园活动以及提出一个你最希望学校改进的方面。
（注意：短文中不得出现任何人名、校名及其它相关信息，否则不予评分。）

Answer 1

A letter to my headmaster
Dear Mr. Headmaster,
How time flies！I’m going to leave this school. In this school I had a lot of great time. But what I won’t forget is the basketball match held one year ago. It was between Grade 8 students and Grade 9 students. During the match, the players played very hard. To our surprise, Grade 8 students won. Grade 9 students also felt happy for them and said “Congratulations!” to them. They became good friends.
Well, sports are very important for us young students. We can learn to work together and make good friends. But I think our school needs to build a new sports area. It should have a soccer section, a basketball section, and a ping-pong section. I believe such facilities will meet our sporting needs.
Thank you for your reading this letter.
Yours faithfully,
Susan

试题分析：这篇短文要求我们以A letter to my headmaster为题写一篇作文，即给校长的一封信。在题目中给了我们这篇短文的重点内容。一是分享一件让你最难忘的校园活动，比如一次篮球比赛；二是提出一个你最希望学校改进的方面，如比赛场地可以更加专业化，分出篮球区、足球区、乒乓球区等。重点内容虽然已经给了我们，但是很多内容都需要我们自己去完成，让它变得完整、合理，内容丰富，这就需要花费我们的想象力，以及我们平时积累的知识。另外，写作时，还需注意语句间的衔接，使文意连贯，表达流畅。最重要的一点要注意叙述那件难忘的活动时，要用一般过去时态；你希望学校改进的地方可以用将来时态或者是现在时态的适当句型来表达。
【亮点说明】这是一篇比较不错的作文。作者首先写了一次难忘的篮球比赛，然后向校长提出一个建议。从整篇来看，层次清晰，内容完整。短文中有些内容完成不错。如Grade 9 students also felt happy for them and said “Congratulations!” to them. They became good friends.等。这些内容都比较贴合文章的需要，意思也很连贯。文章中还用了一些比较好的句型，如How time flies！I believe such facilities will meet our sporting needs.等。