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11．同学们，咸宁市被列为首批国家旅游标准化四个示范城市之一了．让我们也行动起来吧！为了让母校变得更加美好，为家乡建设添砖加瓦，请同学们为校园建设积极建言献策．假如你是滨海中学初三年级学生刘雨，请你写一份建议书． （以上背景内容无需表述）内容要点：1、校园环境（如：植树、种花、运动场、图书馆…）
 2、特色课程（如：舞蹈、音乐…）
3、…注意：1、文中不得出现真实姓名和学校名称；词数80左右．文章开头、结尾已经给出，不计入总词数．
2、要点齐全，语言通顺，意思连贯，书写规范，可以适当发挥．
3、提示词：hope； organize； interestingDear Headmaster，
I am very glad to write to you．These days we are  talking about how  to make our school more beautiful．Here  are  some  of my  suggestions．First，a library with a lot of interesting books in it should be built，so that we can read in our spare time every day．Second，we expect our own dancing hall and piano room．Many of us like dancing，and some are even good at playingthe piano．Third，we dreams of having a playing-field with many flowers and green trees around．We can exercise there every day to make our body strong．Finally，I suggest teachers in our school organize more colorful after-class activities for students．
In a word，I hope our school will attract more visitors and I wish her a good future．
Thanks for your reading!
Yours sincerely，
Liu Yu．

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分析 本题是一篇提纲作文，要求是为了让母校变得更加美好，为家乡建设添砖加瓦，请同学们为校园建设积极建言献策，假如你是刘雨，所以应该以第一人称来写，内容是一份建议书，所以写作时要注意can，should等情态动词的使用．时态以一般现在时为主．

解答 Dear Headmaster，
    I am very glad to write to you．These days we are  talking about how  to make our school more beautiful．Here are some of my suggestions．
    First，a library with a lot of interesting books in it should be built，so that we can read in our spare time every day．
Second，we expect our own dancing hall and piano room．Many of us  like dancing，and some are even good at playing the piano．Third，we dreams of having a playing-field with many flowers and green trees around．We can exercise there every day to make
our body strong．Finally，I suggest  teachers  in our school organize more colorful after-class activities for students．
    In a word，I hope our school will attract more visitors and I wish her a good future．
    Thanks for your reading!Yours sincerely，
           Liu Yu

点评 这是一篇提纲作文，写一篇建议书，短文的开头和结尾已经给出．本作文中给出的要点比较简略，动笔前先要围绕这些要点组织材料，确定写作内容，注意将这些要点全部表达出来，不要偏离文章中心．写作时注意准确运用时态和人称，一定要契合文章要表达的主题，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，例如情态动词的使用，同时也要注意尽可能的用一些连词让文章更有条理．