Question

【题目】书面表达

请以My ideal(理想的) school day 为题写一篇不少于70字的作文

Answer 1

【答案】

My ideal school day

My ideal school day will start at 9:30 a.m. because I like sleeping. The school day finishes at 3:30 p.m. We will have more free time to do other things. We have an hour for lunch. There is a big and beautiful dining hall. We can eat tasty meals, chat and have a rest in it. We can listen to pop music while we have lunch. It's wonderful. We have seven subjects. They are Computer Studies, English, Geography, History, Home Economics, Swimming and Tennis. So we have a swimming pool and a tennis court. We also have many clubs, such as Cooking Lessons, Drama Club, Driving Lessons, Film Club, Reading Club, Singing Group.We wear school uniforms. Girls wear skirts, white blouses, ties and coats. Boys wear black trousers, white shirts, ties and coats.There is a beautiful park and some shops near the school. In the school, there is a big library with lots of books.We don't have homework every day. But we will do some exercises in class. Every month, we go on a school trip. It's interesting.

【解析】

试题分析：这是一篇给材料作文，本文已经给出了主要写作要点，动笔前要先认真阅读要点，然后围绕要点适当发挥。写作中，应注意描述的全面性，尽量将提示的内容利用上；结合材料内容，可知本文主要是第一人称，一般现在及将来时态，注意主谓一致及时间状语与时态的一致问题。语言的表述应该符合语法的结构，造句应该符合英语的表达习惯。适当使用连词，做到上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系。

写作亮点：这篇短文使用的句式较为简单.如: My ideal school day will start…我理想的学校会在……开始；We have an hour for lunch我们有一个小时的时间吃饭等,但是通过一些连词，如：so but等的连接，构成了一篇布局合理，逻辑清楚的文章，把自己想象中的学校介绍的明明白白，不失为一篇上等作文。