Question

4月20日，我国四川雅安发生特大地震，给人们的生命和财产安全带来重大损失。灾后人们纷纷伸出了援助之手。请你以校委会的名义用英语写一份80字左右的倡议书，开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
要点提示：(1)地震带来重大损失：①摧毁了(destroy)村庄；②人们失去了良田和家园；③数百人失去生命；
(2)人们纷纷献出爱心，急忙给灾区人民提供了食物和衣服；
(3)作为中学生我们应该做什么……
Dear schoolmates,
On April 20, An earthquake hit Yaan Sichuan. It brought a great loss to the people there.
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If everyone gives a hand , our world will become much more beautiful .
School committee

Answer 1

Dear schoolmates,
On April 20, An earthquake hit Yaan Sichuan. It brought a great loss to the people there.
The earthquake brought a great loss. It destroyed the villages and towns, so people lost their farmlands and homes. hundreds of people even lost their homes. They had nowhere to live and no food to eat. When people heard the news, they showed their love in different ways. They were in a great hurry to provide food and clothes to the people in disaster areas. Some even gave money to them. As students, I think we should try our best to help the people in need. Let’s save our pocket money and send it to them.
If everyone gives a hand , our world will become much more beautiful .
School committee

解析试题分析：这是一篇给材料作文，所给材料比较详细，写作中注意将雅安发生地震的事实及这次活动目的介绍清楚，并发出捐款的倡议。在写作时要注意时态，人称和固定词组的搭配，要注意语言的规范性。结合材料可知本文主要是一般现在及过去时态，注意时间状语是时态的搭配及主谓一致问题。写作中适当使用连词，序数词，做到上下文联系紧密，、条理清楚，符合逻辑关系。
考点：应用文写作
点评：做英语书面表达时，要注意认真审题，分析体裁，确定时态；分析内容要点，列出一些基本词汇及词组；注意表达的条理性，用好连接词。最后，注意不要犯语法、句法以及搭配性错误。日常学习中，注意多背诵范文，熟记一些经典句型，考试时就能有所参照，有的放矢。