Question

假如你叫李华，市第三中学初三的学生。星期天你和班里的同学去康乐敬老院(old folk’s home) 参加了社区活动。请根据下面的图画的提示词语，用英语写一篇100词左右的日记。可合理想象，适当发挥。句首已给出，不计入总词数。

 

Answer 1

【答案】

 

Sunday                                                              Fine

Today, we took the school bus to Kang Le old folk’s home. The old people greeted us warmly and they were very pleased to see us. We helped them do a lot of things in the old folk’s home. We swept the floor for them, we cleaned the windows and we also cleaned the desk. Some girls danced for them and we enjoyed ourselves that day. Finally, we had lunch together with the old people and the dishes were very delicious.

As the students in Grade Nine in No.3 Middle School, we like the activity very much. And I think it’s our duty to help the old people, do you think so?

【解析】（一）审题

本篇作文考查的为记叙文。要求利用所给的信息列举在星期天去往敬老院的经过。然后写出你个人的观点。

（二）列举写作要点

1. 乘坐的交通工具，去往敬老院。老人见到我们的心情。

2. 在敬老院，我们为老人做的事情。我们的感受。

3. 总结：作为学生我们很喜欢参加社区活动。帮助老人是我们的职责。

（三）列举重点短语和句型

重点短语:take the school bus, help sb do sth, sweep the floor, clean the windows, clean the desk, enjoy oneself , have lunch

重点句型：We swept the floor for them, we cleaned the windows and we also cleaned the desk.

And I think it’s our duty to help the old people.

【评分标准】

第一档	（13~15分）	信息完整，表达流畅，无语言错误或基本无语言错误。
第二档	（10~12分）	信息基本完整，表达较流畅，有少量错误，但不影响意思表达。
第三档	（7~9分）	能传递部分信息，表达不够流畅，但句子基本可读。
第四档	（4~6分）	只能传递少量信息，表达不通顺，只有少量句子可读。
第五档	（1~3分）	只能传递个别信息，表达不清楚，只有个别句子可读。