3. 正确

2. rings 改为rang，时态应上下一致

1.去掉in， in this afternoon 是一个中式英语

10. Lily 后加for ， “praise sb for doing sth”为固定词组“因…而感谢某人”

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we had a P. E. lesson in this afternoon. Our teacher taught us　 1.　　　

to practise the long jump. When the bell rings，we gathered　 2.　　　

on the playground. After warming-up exercises，the teacher　 3.　 　　

　told us the way of long jump and showed us how to do. Then　 4.　　　

we followed the teacher and practiced one or another. Soon　　 5.　　　

came my turn，but I felt a bit of nervous. Though I failed　　 6.　　　

the first time,but Ididn't lose my heart. I kept on practising.　　 7.　　

At last I was able to jump over more than 3 meters.From this　 8.　　　

lesson ,I came to see that one will succee if he has perseverance.　 9.　　　

And I decide I will do as many as I can to do every thing in future. 10. 　　　　

答案及解析

9. And 改为But 前后是转折关系

8. very 改为 so, 这里用到so…that 结构

7. 去掉on 或把on改为up

6. 正确

5. Without 改为With

4. them 改为it ,这里指钱夹