Question

16．假定你是李华，你的美国朋友Tom一周前给你发电子邮件，询问你暑假里的打算，但你因准备期末考试未能及时回复．请你根据下面的要求给他回一封邮件，要点如下：
1．未及时回信的原因；
2．你假期的打算（如做兼职、旅游、做志愿者等）．
3．询问他的打算
注意：1．词数100左右；2．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3．开头已为你写好．
Dear Tom，
     I'm sorry that I haven't replied to your last e-mail in time because                    
                                                                                  
                                                                               
                                                                    Yours，
                                                                    Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文是篇邮件应用文，内容提示较简洁，只是框架，但学生容易把握写作要求和写作目的．考生在写作之前必修认真审题，首先要注意文章的时态，用一般现在时和将来时．人称用第一和第二人称．根据写作要求文章分三段来写．第一段首先对不能及时回复邮件表示歉意并表明原因，之后提出自己的打算．第二段重点描述自己的具体计划和想法．第三段总结全文．再有就是不能根据材料逐字逐句的翻译应该注意句子的衔接，以提高作文的档次．
【亮点说明】文章要点齐全，表达思路明确，知识点运用恰当到位，文中使用了非常好的短语和句子为文章增色不少，比如in time，prefer to go travelling，cultural background，broaden one's horizon，enrich one's knowledge等．还运用了现在完成进行时since I have been preparing for the final exam recently；to do做目的状语not only to enjoy the delicious food，but to learn about people from a different cultural background；定语从句where I can appreciate the creations of nature and relax myself；which should not be missed to broaden my horizon as well as enriching my knowledge．等等．并注意了句子的衔接如：first，second，finally，all in all等．
 I'm glad to receive your email，and I am sorry I couldn't reply in time since I have been preparing for the final exam recently．（高分句型一）
 First，I would spend a couple of days in Japan not only to enjoy the delicious food，but to learn about people from a different cultural background．（高分句型二）
Second，walking through a well-known national park is another must on my list，where I can appreciate the creations of nature and relax myself．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Tom，
       I'm glad to receive your email，and I am sorry I couldn't reply in time since I have been preparing for the final exam recently．（高分句型一）In your email，you asked me about my plan of the summer holidays．If it comes to a choice，I prefer to go travelling．
       First，I would spend a couple of days in Japan not only to enjoy the delicious food，but to learn about people from a different cultural background．（高分句型二）Second，walking through a well-known national park is another must on my list，where I can appreciate the creations of nature and relax myself．（高分句型三）Finally，I would visit some museums which should not be missed to broaden my horizon as well as enriching my knowledge．
        All in all，travelling is the best choice to recharge ourselves and get ready for the new challenges．Let's just pack our suitcases and start our trip!
       Best wishes．
                                                                                                                                                                                                 Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                  Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．