Question

某校英文报开辟了一个专栏：Opinions。本期话题是：行动胜过话语。请结合发生在你身边的一两件事情，如：学习、勤俭节约、保护环境...。以“ Action Speaks Louder Than Words”为题写一篇英语短文，说明”喊破嗓子不如甩开膀子”。

注意：1.字数：120词左右；2．短文中不能出现有关于本人真实校名、班级、人名等具体信息；

 

Answer 1

【答案】

不唯一

We all know: no pains, no gains. As students, we should now try our best to learn all the subjects well so that we can be well prepared for the challenges in the future.

With the improvement of the living standards, many people are no longer interested in the simple life style and some of them even feel ashamed to be thrifty. In their eyes, thrift is already out of style. However, still other people insist that thrift is a good virtue, because our natural resources are limited and some of them even are on the decline.

The problem of air pollution becomes even more serious. So nowadays we advocate to lead a low-carbon life. My suggestion is we should ride bikes more often instead of driving cars.By riding a bike, we can not only exercise our body but also protect our environment.

There is no doubt that words are a good way to express our gratitude. However, there is something else that we can do to thank those who have given us a hand. As the saying goes, action speaks louder than words. We may thank others in actions, such as helping them in return, rather than only in words.

【解析】

试题分析：一、认真审题，把握要求，找准提示语中的关键句。开放作文需要考生根据试题提示的要求进行立意，确定文章的中心思想。立意的基础是审题。因此，考生在着手写作之前，要认真审题，把握命题要求，找准提示语中的关键句。二、依据关键句，草拟提纲，梳理文章脉络。　　         通过认真审题，找准关键句以后，下一步的任务就是如何安排已选定的这些材料，要为自己心中所设想的材料草拟一个提纲，梳理清楚先后顺序。这样写起来就会有条不紊、条理清楚、详略得当，使得所写的文章中心突出。 三、准确定位人称、时态。遣词造句要扬长避短。考生应该依据文章提示准确定位人称。在人称、时态准确定位以后，考生应将重点放在文章的遣词造句上。考生应尽可能运用自己熟悉的单词、短语或句型来灵活表达，但要避免单词、短语或句型的重复使用。简而言之，开放作文的写作思路和汉语作文非常相似。首先要明确主题，然后根据主题构建文章的主体结构，即写作提纲，最后在写作过程中要突出主题、层次分明。 第一步　构建框架，清晰行文 [谋篇布局] 第二步　打造亮句，增色文章。

考点：提纲作文。

点评：由于对英语词汇了解和掌握有限，再加上母语对我们思维的影响，写作中常会出现赘词和冗繁的问题。 赘词是指使用了不必要的词语。这些词语只是用来“填空、充数”的，没有增加任何新的意义；冗繁是指对读者来说不十分必要的信息，或句子中重复的词语。 赘词和冗繁使句子结构松松垮垮，使文章冗长、拖沓。因此，我们应该在用词上仔细揣摩，准确清晰地表达我们的思想，剔除冗词赘语，使文章言简意赅。